Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

These days,the smooking is one of the major cause of diseases.But what is the most effective method for dealing with smookers to guide them to avoide smooking so that they can prevent from the seroius results.Some people believe that mild smooking does not effect the health.But i tottly regected the statement,because i abserve many individuals who start smooking just from minor level in the name of adventure but later it become didifficlt for them to overcome this habit.My opinion that we should guide the people not to banned the cigrattee productions.

Firstly, i addmited that smooking is tha cause of serious illness diseases,like Lungs cancer,repiratory issues etc.But i think we should educate the people to inhihits the smooking to prevent them from diseases .if called it illeagal in country goverment will banned the production of tobaacoo which is raw material for making cigratee this will harms the economy of country.The farmers who grow tobacco can face serious situation.

Another reason,why i disagree that industeries who made the cigrettes ,there are many employes working there it is the source of there income.for example if it banned in country large number of people will lost there job .

On the other hand goverment should arrange saminars and made health care organization that provide the information to people so ,they can learn the circumstances of smooking habit.

In conlution,a;though it is a common belief that smooking can cause serious illness and only way to over come should made illegal

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a position against making smoking illegal and give relevant reasons: you argue that prohibition could affect tobacco farmers and cigarette-industry employees, and you suggest education and health information instead. You also acknowledge that smoking causes serious illnesses. However, the position is not consistently expressed: the opening says people should be guided rather than production banned, while the conclusion is unfinished and appears to repeat the opposing view. The economic points are asserted but not explained in depth, and the response does not fully explore why education would be more effective than a legal ban. The response is 246 words, below the required 250. Develop each reason with a clear explanation or example, and finish with a direct, consistent conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs, a counterpoint beginning “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. Sequencing words such as “Firstly” and “Another reason” help signal the main points. However, progression is uneven: the first body paragraph combines health effects, government policy, the economy, and farmers, making the relationship between ideas difficult to follow. Some links are mechanical or unclear, and the final sentence is incomplete, so the conclusion does not bring the argument together. Use one main idea per paragraph, connect each claim to its explanation, and ensure pronouns and references clearly identify what they refer to. A complete concluding paragraph would make the overall progression more coherent.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “serious illnesses,” “respiratory issues,” “tobacco,” “economy,” and “source of income,” so the reader can generally identify your subject and reasons. However, the range is limited and several words are repeated, especially “smoking,” “people,” and “country.” Frequent spelling errors—such as “smooking,” “cigrattee,” and “industeries”—and inaccurate word choices such as “inhihits the smoking” make parts of the response difficult to understand. Some phrases are also unnatural, for example “overcome this habit” is clearer than “overcome this habit” only if the surrounding sentence is corrected. Build a reliable set of topic collocations and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “But” and a conditional idea about what might happen if smoking were banned. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and punctuation sometimes make the meaning hard to follow. For example, “the smooking is one of the major cause” has problems with the article and singular/plural agreement, while “if it banned in country large number of people will lost there job” lacks a correctly formed conditional clause and has errors in the main clause. Several sentences also run together without clear punctuation. Practise accurate sentence patterns first, then combine ideas using controlled clauses and proofread for complete sentences.

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