Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Many people are smoking long period extremely. This could make very harmful health issues for people. Government should introduce special laws for against smoking members. I agree from my perspective, with this statement.

Initially, smokers were trying to released their stress level to low for this reason they started as a habit in a day. Then smoking habit set as a routine for smokers then they become as chainsmokers. Additionally, they could face many health issues such as cancers, body pains, kidney stones, lungs. These kinds of body parts would affect significantly. Morever, most of the chain smokers have been smoking since teenager period because, that time most of the smokers started to use that. In addition, smokers family members get numerous drawbacks likey, financial support if the smoke person wants treatment.

On the other hand, government should introduce many laws for against smokers due to, they may wrong inspiration for academic students, even though some school pupils are interesting to attempt a smoke in their young age which make harmful in their future lives. However, government should include fine package with strict punishment for smokers. Furthermore, special rules and regualations for school students because, they have more access in this modern world.

In general, smoking is the biggest nightmare for all the men, even though female members are trying cegarettes to reduce stress level. This make pregnancy issues for them very seriously.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You state a clear general position—“I agree”—and give relevant reasons, including health risks, effects on young people, and pregnancy concerns. However, the response only partially develops the question of whether smoking should be made illegal. Much of the discussion describes harms or proposes fines and school rules, without explaining whether a complete ban is justified or how it could work. Several claims, such as smoking causing “kidney stones” and being a “wrong inspiration,” are not explained or supported with examples. The conclusion also does not clearly restate your position. The response is 17 words below the required minimum, which limits the space available to develop your reasoning. Explain your main reasons more fully and support them with specific examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

Your response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a concluding paragraph. The ideas are generally related to the topic, and linking expressions such as “Additionally,” “On the other hand,” and “Furthermore” show an effort to connect points. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the first body paragraph moves from stress relief to health effects and then family finances without explaining the links. “On the other hand” introduces more arguments in favour of government action rather than a contrasting view, so the relationship between paragraphs is confusing. Some connectors are repeated or used mechanically. Group related points together, make each paragraph’s main idea clear, and use linking phrases only when their logical relationship is accurate.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “health issues,” “strict punishment,” “stress level,” and “pregnancy issues,” so the reader can identify your main subject. However, the range is limited, and several inaccurate or unnatural expressions make ideas difficult to understand. For example, “smoking long period extremely,” “released their stress level to low,” and “wrong inspiration” do not express the intended meanings clearly. There are also spelling errors such as “Morever,” “regualations,” and “cegarettes,” alongside imprecise wording such as “body parts” and “fine package.” Build a more accurate set of collocations for health effects, addiction, and legal measures, and check spelling and word forms during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses beginning with “because” and “even though.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors in verb forms, sentence construction, articles, and agreement can make the reader work to understand your meaning. Examples include “smokers were trying to released,” “they become as chainsmokers,” and “This make pregnancy issues.” Some sentences are also incomplete or awkwardly joined, as in “Government should introduce special laws for against smoking members.” Focus first on building accurate simple sentences, then practise joining them with one clear subordinate clause. Check subject–verb agreement and verb forms, and avoid placing “because” after a comma when it leaves the sentence structure incomplete.

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