Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people believe that smoking can cause serious dieases and should be made illegal.I totally agree with this statement because many illnesses are starting from smoking and another thing is it wastes youth's future because of this reason countries are not able to develop.These reasons are expanded in the following paraagraphs.

First and foresmost, by smoking people may be covered up with the different illnesses such as cancer, cough, fever and other serious diseases for particuler body parts.For example, many people just died at small age and only reason is they regulary intake smoke from Sigarets, Wipes so it lead them towards to death.In addition, if they do not from this then they will suffer from dengurous illnesses which is wrost than death.So because of that the government should ban smoking to help people.

Secondly, young people are copying adults and try smoking and eventually, it will become their habit and at a small age they can lost their lives and suffer from disease.They thought these kind of things are cool and they are just smoking because of trend which is deadly for them.But if the authority made it illegal than this kind of stuffs are not available in market and it will save future of our country cause youth do not smoke then they will not die early and they help to contribute to an increament of nation's GDP.

In conclusion, smoking is must have to made illegal by the government because it has so many bad causes for population of country and it will always harmful for country and people both.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction (“I totally agree”) and remains consistent in the conclusion. You give two relevant reasons: smoking harms health, and young people may copy adults and develop the habit. The examples of illness and the effect on young people help address the prompt. However, some claims are unclear or insufficiently explained, such as “many people just died at small age,” and the link between smoking, national development, and GDP is asserted rather than demonstrated. The discussion also focuses mainly on banning smoking without considering how making it illegal would address the problem. Develop each reason with a clearer explanation or a specific, credible example to make the argument more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting separate reasons, and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “First and foremost,” “Secondly,” and “In conclusion” make the overall progression easy to follow. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical, with repeated “because” and “so” constructions, and some links between ideas are difficult to follow. For example, the move from young people copying adults to the country’s GDP needs a clearer explanation. Referencing in “if they do not from this” is also unclear, making the intended connection hard to identify. Use a wider range of linking methods and make each sentence’s relationship to the previous one explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “serious diseases,” “government,” “authority,” and “GDP,” so the reader can understand the general subject and your main points. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make parts of the argument difficult to interpret. Phrases such as “covered up with the different illnesses,” “intake smoke,” and “wastes youth’s future” are not natural ways to express these ideas. There are also noticeable misspellings, including “dieases,” “foresmost,” and “dengurous.” Build a more accurate set of expressions for discussing health risks, addiction, and public policy, and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a reason clause in “I totally agree with this statement because…” and a conditional idea beginning “if the authority made it illegal.” This shows some variety, but control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make the intended meaning unclear. For example, “young people … can lost their lives” has an incorrect verb form, while “smoking is must have to made illegal” has problems with the verb construction. Sentence boundaries and punctuation also need attention, as several sentences run together without spaces after full stops. Practise accurate modal and conditional structures, and review verb forms and sentence punctuation.

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