Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

There is no doubt that smoking caused detrimental illnesses such as lung damage, cancer, heart and vessel diseases and a lot more. I strongly agree with that it should be banned.

The tobacco smoke contains thousants of harmful toxic chemicles including cancer causing agents, nicotine, carbon monoxide which damage every part of body. In Pakistan the trend of smoking increasing day by day and people are suffering badly with the consequances. The number of patients of cancer is increasing but still there is people are using cigarette. More than 90% lungs cancer caused by tobacco smoke, which can harm mouth, throat, blandder and stomach. Additionally, nicotine and carbon monoxide block the arteries and norrow the blood veccels which can cause blood pressure, heart attack, blood clods and strokes.

Nicotine can cause addiction. It changes the patterns of brain and creating a powerful chemical dependence. By stopping it individual can suffer from anxiety and feel uncomfertable. There are a lot of people who are really addictive of smoking and whenever they try to leave it they suffer from axiety and make someone really uncomfertable. Not this smoking can harm environment and others who do not smoke. Breathing in smoky air can cause serious issues for non-smokers, the same toxic chemicles cause asthma attack and serious lungs problems. I totally agree with the above statement that it should be banned.The Government should force strict rule regarding this. It is the serious threat for smokers, non-smokers and environment .

In conclusion, smoking is really dangerous due to it's harmful consequences. The Government should has strict check on it and it should be consider illegal.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

Your position is clear from the opening—“I strongly agree”—and remains consistent in the conclusion. You address the central issue by explaining health risks to smokers, the addictive effects of nicotine, and harm to non-smokers, so the response covers the task and gives relevant supporting reasons. The examples about cancer, cardiovascular problems and second-hand smoke help extend these points. However, some claims are broad and would be more convincing with explanation or a specific example; for instance, the statement about rising cancer cases in Pakistan is not supported with detail. The recommendation that government should make smoking illegal is also asserted rather than explored, such as by considering how a ban could be enforced or why it is preferable to regulation. Develop these implications to make the argument more fully supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting health and addiction-related arguments, and a conclusion. Ideas generally progress from harm to smokers to effects on others, and linking expressions such as “Additionally,” “Not this,” and “In conclusion” signal relationships between points. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. “Not this” does not accurately introduce the point about environmental and second-hand harm, and the shift from addiction to effects on non-smokers would benefit from a clearer transition. Several ideas are crowded into long paragraphs, while the conclusion repeats the position without synthesising the reasons. Use clearer paragraph focus, more precise referencing, and transitions that show how each point supports the case for prohibition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “nicotine,” “carbon monoxide,” “chemical dependence,” “arteries,” and “second-hand” effects, which allows you to discuss several aspects of smoking. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “detrimental illnesses” and “serious threat.” However, spelling errors are frequent and sometimes distract the reader: examples include “thousants,” “chemicles,” “consequances,” and “veccels.” Some word choices and collocations are also inaccurate or awkward, such as “lungs cancer,” “leave it” for quitting smoking, and “strict check.” Repetition of “harmful,” “serious,” and “cause” limits variety. Check spelling carefully and learn natural collocations such as “lung cancer,” “quit smoking,” and “enforce strict regulations” to make your vocabulary more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “which can harm mouth, throat…” and a conditional structure beginning “whenever they try to leave it.” These attempts show some range, but control is inconsistent, and errors occur across verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction. For example, “the trend of smoking increasing” needs a finite verb, while “there is people are using cigarette” combines incompatible structures. The conclusion’s “should has” and “it should be consider” also show problems with modal verbs and passive forms. Punctuation and spacing are occasionally faulty, as in “banned.The Government.” Practise building accurate clauses and checking subject–verb agreement, articles and verb forms before adding complexity.

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