Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In mordern day smoking has become one of the most serious problem in the world, Causing cancer , tv such illness .

Smoking has become an addiction to students in recent days. Because students feel too much pressure during their exam period .To solve this problem they are getting addicted to smoking and drugs.Causing in many illness.One of the main reason of addiction in depresssion. Students get depressed so often now a days and get addictted.

Not only students but also older people are getting addictted to smoking . So many people everyday are dying because of cancer,making it the one of the most deadly illness .

In my opinion , Smoking should be banned permanently, Rather than seeing the effects afterwards.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You take a clear position in the final sentence, saying smoking “should be banned permanently,” and you give relevant reasons, including cancer and addiction among students and older people. However, the response addresses the question only minimally: it does not explain the extent of your agreement in a developed way, and the reasons are mostly asserted rather than supported with examples or explanation. The link between exam pressure and smoking, for instance, needs clarification, and the claim that people are dying from cancer is not developed. The response also falls short of the required 250 words, leaving little space to address the task fully. Develop two or three reasons and explain how each supports your position, while considering why making smoking illegal would be appropriate or effective.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is some basic organisation: the response moves from the general problem to student addiction, then to older people, and finally to your opinion. This gives the reader a rough sense of direction. However, progression is limited, and several ideas are joined awkwardly or left as fragments, such as “Because students feel too much pressure during their exam period” and “Causing in many illness.” The repeated focus on addiction also makes the middle paragraphs feel repetitive rather than progressively developed. Use complete sentences and clearer links between cause, consequence, and your argument. A more purposeful paragraph structure—introduction with a position, developed reason paragraphs, and a conclusion—would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “addiction,” “pressure,” “depressed,” and “cancer,” so the general subject is understandable. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make the writing less clear, including “mordern,” “illness” where a plural is needed, and “addictted.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “one of the most deadly illness” and “seeing the effects afterwards.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and a wider range of terms for discussing health and policy, such as “smoking-related diseases,” “prohibit tobacco sales,” or “public health consequences.” Proofreading spelling and checking whether a noun should be singular or plural will also improve clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response relies mainly on short, simple sentence patterns, with little evidence of controlled complex structures. Several sentences are incomplete or incorrectly connected: “Because students feel too much pressure during their exam period” is a dependent clause standing alone, while “Causing in many illness” is a fragment. There are also frequent problems with agreement and sentence construction, as in “one of the most serious problem” and “So many people everyday are dying.” Punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, including the capital letter after a comma in “world, Causing.” These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise combining clauses accurately with “because,” “which,” and “as a result,” and check subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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