Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Smoking is one of the main factor of serious illnesses and it should not be normalize and made illegal. This essay will partially agree with the statement that smoking can cause a damage of the health and the lifestyle of every individual.

Nowadays, numerous individuals normalize smoking and making it as a habit. Smoking can cause a huge impact of peple's health and distroying their body espcially the lungs. One of the main reason why people smoke is people believe that it can reduce the stress and can make them forget all their problems. However, eventually of smoking people tend to forgot that smoking could make their lives in danger due to the fact that smoking is a bad habit espcially for the younsgters who smoke. For instance, young people start smoking at a young age due to the lack of vision of the parents for their children and can mislead of the life of every young individuals.

Furthermore, bad habit can lead to a different or bad lifestyle. Although it reduces stress to those people who smoke, it should be made illegal and never be normalize, and governments should take action especially that a large number of people died due to smoking. In addition, government should banned cigarettes espcially for youngsters who is under age.

In conclusion, smoking is never been a good habit, it is making every individuals life shorter and making them less healthy. In my opinion, smoking is one of the main reason why youngsters sometimes go in the wrong path of life because of the lifestyle they have.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a position that is partly supportive of making smoking illegal, and you give relevant points about health, stress, young people and government action. However, the extent of your agreement is not clearly explained: the opening says you “partially agree,” while the body argues that smoking “should be made illegal” without identifying what you disagree with. Several ideas remain general or unclear, such as the claim that smoking leads young people onto “the wrong path,” and the example about parents does not show specifically how smoking causes serious illness. To strengthen the response, state your position consistently and develop each main reason with a clear explanation or a concrete example linked directly to illness and the proposed ban.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “Furthermore,” “In addition” and “In conclusion” help identify the stages of the argument. The ideas are generally grouped by topic, including health effects and government action. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow: the discussion moves from stress relief to danger, then to parental supervision and young people without clearly showing how these points connect. Repeated references to “bad habit” and smoking also make the development feel circular. Use a clearer sequence—claim, explanation, example, link to the question—and make references such as “it” and “they” unambiguous.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “serious illnesses,” “stress,” “lungs,” “government” and “under age,” so the reader can identify the subject and your main concerns. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation and spelling errors make parts of the argument less clear. Examples include “a huge impact of people’s health,” “normalize smoking,” “distroying” and “youngsters.” Some expressions are also vague or unnatural, such as “wrong path of life.” Aim for more precise combinations, for example, describe smoking as damaging health or increasing the risk of disease, and use consistent formal wording. Proofreading spelling and choosing accurate phrases will make your ideas easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “although,” “because” and “due to the fact that.” This shows an effort to connect reasons and consequences. However, errors are frequent, and some sentence patterns are difficult to follow. For example, “Smoking is one of the main factor” has an agreement error, while “government should banned” uses the wrong verb form. In “people tend to forgot,” the verb form is also incorrect, and “young people … who is under age” has a subject–verb agreement problem. Articles, plurals and sentence construction also need attention. Practise building accurate basic sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check each verb against its subject and tense.

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