Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Smoking kills we see and read this statement everyday but upto what extent people believe this? I would probebly say there should be age restriction on smoking. Those men or women whose age is lower than the eighteen should be jailed for a week or two. In this essay those all topics would be covered.

As we can see every somking pack has an instruction written on it that is "Smoking Kills", instead of this statement people go to markets and buys dozens of ciagrette packets to smoke daily. In my opinion smoking should be made illegal a male or a female whose age is lesser than eighteen smoking should me made illegal on them. If somebody sees them buying ciagrettes they should call the police beacuse somking kills. If affect human lungs, darkens the colour of lips, it is a main cause of high blood pressure and mainly it targets kidenys. Nicotine in a ciagrette is the main ingredient and its effects sleep. Nicotine would keep your mind overactive and beacuse of that overactivity it would definitely affect your sleep. Somehow we should keep over children away from that and we should never somke infront of our kids. If there is a case that a pseron is smoking for a long time periods so its would probably be difficult for that individual to quit smoking ciagrette. However, the doctors have a a solution for that specific senario that this person should lower the smoking frequency.

In conlusion, the statement "Smoking kills" is definitely correct and those things which is dangerous for health should be made illegal. There should be specific lawful acting over smoking.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a relevant response by arguing for restrictions on smoking, especially for people under eighteen, and you include health effects such as harm to the lungs and sleep. However, the task asks whether smoking should be made illegal, and your position shifts: you support making it illegal for minors, but do not clearly say whether you agree with a general ban for adults. Several points are asserted rather than explained, and the suggestion that young smokers should be jailed is not supported with reasoning or an example. The conclusion repeats that dangerous things should be illegal without resolving this distinction. State your position on a complete ban clearly, then develop two reasons and explain how they support that position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

Your response has an introduction, a main paragraph and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. Some ideas are also linked with phrases such as “In my opinion,” “However,” and “In conclusion.” Nevertheless, the progression within the main paragraph is difficult to follow: it moves from age restrictions to health effects, nicotine and sleep, protecting children, and quitting without clearly grouping or connecting these points. The opening question and the promise that “those all topics would be covered” do not establish a clear line of argument. Use separate paragraphs for your main reasons, and make each paragraph develop one central point with a clear explanation and example.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “age restriction,” “Nicotine,” “high blood pressure,” and “quit smoking,” which helps communicate the subject. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or awkward, such as “lawful acting,” “lower the smoking frequency,” and “keep over children away from that.” Repeated use of “smoking,” “illegal,” and “kills” also makes the wording less varied. Spelling errors—including “somking,” “ciagrette,” “beacuse,” and “kidenys”—are noticeable and can slow the reader. Build a more accurate set of phrases for discussing legislation, health risks and cessation, and check spelling carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a conditional idea beginning “If somebody sees them buying…,” and your main meaning is generally recoverable. However, the longer structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently in agreement, articles, verb forms and sentence boundaries. For example, “people go to markets and buys” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “If affect human lungs” is an incomplete sentence. In “those things which is dangerous,” the verb does not agree with the plural subject. Some sentences also join several ideas without clear punctuation. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a correctly formed supporting clause, then check agreement and sentence boundaries.

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