Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

IN THE MODERNERA ADDICTION PLAY A SIGNIFICANT ROLE IN EVERY INDIVIDUAL LIFE . NOW A DAY MORE AND MORE PEOPLE ADDICTED TOWARD A SMOKING AND IT LEAD TO LIFE THREATINING CONDITION AND ALSO ILLEGAL TO DO SMOKING. I AGREE WITH THE STATEMENT AND SUPPORTING POINT WILLBE ELABORATED IN SUBSEQUENT PARAGRAPHS.

TO BEGIN WITH, THE MOST PROMINENT REASON IS DIRECTLY AFFECT THE HEALTH OF ACTIVE SMOKER. TO ELABORATE THERE ARE MANY REASONG TO GET ADDICTEDTO SMOKING IN WITH MOST CONSIDERABLE REASON IS SHOW OFF AND GROUP WITH ILLEGAL ACTIVITY WHICH CAN PROMOTE PRESON FOR DO SMOKING WERE AS IT ALSO AFFECT NON SMOKER BY CONTACT WITH SOMKER PERSON BECAUSE PASSIVE SMOKER IF STAY WITH ACTIVE SMOKER IT LEAD TO INJECTIN OD AIR SPREAD BY ACTIVE SMOKER PERSON AND AFFECT THEIR HEALTH.APART FROM THIS TOBACCO CONSUMPTION CAN LEAD TO VARIOUS HEALTH PROBLEM AND AFFECT MANY SYSTEMS OF OUR BODY SUCH AS RESPIRATORY ,CARDIOVASCULAR, URINARY, DIGESTIVE AND ALSO RIPRODUCTIVE BY VARIOUS SYMPTOMS SUCH AS DAMAGE TRACHIA, MOUTH ULCER , INCREASE HEART WORKLOAD , DAMAGE IN KIDNEY IN FILTERATION OF TIXINS , ALSO IN REPRODUCTIVE DECREASE LIBIDO AND SPERM COUNT IN MALE OR IN FEMALE IT LEAD TO HORMONAL CHANGE. A PART FROM THIS TOBACCO COUNSUMPTIN ALSO HIGH THE CHANCES OF FETALDISEASE SUCH AS CANCER WHICH HAVE VERY LOW CHANCE OF CURE AFTER ACHIEVE LATTER STAGE.

PARADOXICALLY , IN ANOTHER VIEW, IN OUR CONTRY IS KNOWN FOR THE FARMER SO TOBACCO FARMING IS HIGHER IN OUR COUNTRY IF ANY APPLICATION READING BAND TOBACCO IT LEAD GENERATE THE SURVIVAL DIFFICULTIES FOR FARMER.

TO CONCLUDE I STRONGLY AGREE WITH THE STATEMENT THAT SMOKING CAND ILLEGAL AND LEAD TO MANY FETAL DISEASEAS.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of banning smoking. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. While you provide a detailed list of health consequences, the explanation of why it should be illegal is somewhat superficial. The counter-argument regarding tobacco farmers is introduced but remains underdeveloped, as you do not explain how this conflict could be resolved or why the health benefits outweigh the economic concerns. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-supported argument that directly links back to the question of legality.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is often disrupted by awkward phrasing and missing transitions. While you use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with' and 'Apart from this', the connections between sentences are sometimes mechanical or unclear. For instance, the transition to the counter-argument ('Paradoxically, in another view') is abrupt and the subsequent sentence structure makes the point difficult to follow. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one will significantly enhance the readability of your work.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to discuss the topic, particularly regarding medical terminology (e.g., 'respiratory', 'cardiovascular', 'toxins'). However, there are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'life threatining', 'tixins', and 'fetal' (likely intended as 'fatal'). These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise vocabulary and ensure you are spelling key terms correctly. Avoid informal phrasing like 'show off' and strive for a more academic tone throughout the essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('addiction play', 'tobacco consumption also high'), missing articles, and incorrect preposition usage. Complex sentence attempts are often faulty, which makes the meaning unclear in several places. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Proofreading for punctuation and capitalization errors would also help, as the current lack of spacing after punctuation marks affects the overall presentation.

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