Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Advancements in lifestyles has lead mankind to various pros and cons, one of them is the activity of smoking. Smoking can invite serious illness and should be announced illegal. In my opinion, just banning these products cannot solution to the problem but punishing the doers can make a change, however the essay will discuss the issues and remedies to overcome the negativity in the following paragraphs.

Foremost, our nation is the largest producer of tobacco and the production is not the obstacle actually but the motive of not exporting the product is the real one.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is significantly under the 250-word minimum requirement, which severely limits your ability to develop your ideas. You have introduced the topic and stated a position, but the essay stops abruptly after only two short paragraphs. Because you have not provided sufficient reasons or examples to support your argument, the task is only partially addressed. To improve, you must expand your response by providing a clear structure with a well-developed introduction, at least two body paragraphs with supporting evidence, and a conclusion. Currently, the response is too brief to demonstrate the ability to develop an argument effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The text is too short to demonstrate a full range of cohesive devices or effective paragraphing. While you have attempted to use transition words like 'Foremost' and 'however', the logical progression is interrupted because the essay is incomplete. The ideas presented in the second paragraph do not clearly link back to the main argument regarding the illegality of smoking, making the overall structure feel disjointed. To achieve a higher band, ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that your ideas flow logically from one to the next using a variety of linking words.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is somewhat limited and contains several inaccuracies. For example, you use 'announced illegal' instead of 'declared illegal' or 'banned', and 'cannot solution to the problem' is grammatically incorrect. The phrase 'punishing the doers' is also unnatural in this context. While you have attempted to use some academic vocabulary, the errors in word choice and collocation hinder the precision of your writing. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and using more precise academic terminology to express your ideas clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are several grammatical errors that affect the clarity of your writing. You have issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'Advancements... has lead' (should be 'have led'), and sentence structure, such as 'just banning these products cannot solution to the problem'. Additionally, the sentence 'the production is not the obstacle actually but the motive of not exporting the product is the real one' is confusing and poorly constructed. You need to focus on basic sentence construction, verb tenses, and ensuring that your sentences are grammatically complete and accurate.

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