Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Health is significant role in our life. Smoking is directly affect of healthcare system. smoking can always harm to our bodies. such as they cause cancer , especially lungs as well as they serious effect of bodies. I am strongly agree with this statement, because this is really of life. The governments is developed new legislation due to smoking.

Many people are addicted smoking.

Nowadays, individuals are trend to smoking. Furthermore, family issues, failures in life, friend suggest to smoking, as well as nowadays, trend to smoking. Once times a smoke, after that habits in our bodies.

Smoking cause a serious problems such as lungs cancer and heart disease. Smoking is damaged our lungs thats why the authorities should be take a bans. For example, people who smoke regularly have a higher risk of developing lung cancer and heart disease.

Another reason, smoking also harms other surrounding members through breathing problems. For example, children who lived in smokers may developed breathing problems even if they do not smoke.

The authorities should be law the cigarettes illegal. This law have been developed the reduced number of people avoided to cigarettes, especially youngers and teenagers. For instance, cigarettes were not available in any shops, markets, or any other public places. Teenagers were found to difficult to start smoking.

The people are started to addiction of smoking. These smoking can not easily not give up. Meanwhile, If can be avoided smoking.

In conclusion, smoking is harmful to people heath and cause a serious diseases. Therefore this smoking is prohibited by the government. People should be aware this smoking and created to the prevent smoking program. while, public should be awared.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of banning smoking. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. While you provide reasons such as health risks and the impact on others, the arguments are often repetitive and lack depth. For example, the point about 'family issues' and 'friend suggest' is not clearly linked to the argument for a ban. The conclusion is somewhat repetitive and does not fully synthesize the main points. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed argument with specific supporting evidence rather than listing general statements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression between sentences is often weak. Many sentences feel disconnected, and the use of cohesive devices is mechanical or inaccurate. For instance, phrases like 'Once times a smoke' and 'Meanwhile, If can be avoided smoking' are confusing and disrupt the flow of ideas. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow your train of thought. To improve, focus on using transition words like 'consequently,' 'furthermore,' or 'in addition' more naturally to link your ideas together logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'smoking,' 'harmful,' and 'serious,' and there are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'smoking is directly affect of healthcare system' and 'authorities should be law the cigarettes illegal.' These errors occasionally impede communication. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your range of vocabulary to include more precise academic terms and ensure that words are used in their correct grammatical form (e.g., using 'addiction' as a noun rather than 'addicted smoking').

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of your writing. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The governments is developed'), verb tense usage (e.g., 'The people are started to addiction'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper syntax, such as 'Smoking is damaged our lungs thats why the authorities should be take a bans.' While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like article usage and verb forms will significantly improve your score.

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