Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

smoking is very dangerous for our health.it can cause serious illness like cancer,liver prolems etc.yes i agreee is very harm for our health.it should be made illegal.contries should control smoking .many countries effort so much.but the smoking rate is increasing day by day.it damage for our encomic and social life.

its can effect other peoples which can stay a smoking people.

now a days smoking effected on a children.i want that government should play a important role to reduce smoking.many patients in hospitals just because of a smoking .so kindly parents should eyes on children .and tell the side effects of smoking.

i can decribe smoking because my family member my own grandfather smoke. his liver damge, stomach problem.nervous system are totally week due to smoking.then that my grandfather can not rid this smoking just because smoking gives them releif.i saw many peoples in my life which smokes and then stay in hospital but he did not want to rid it.i saw a many people which totally disapponited of your life then smoke is the last source to releif your self .i appeal to the government please play a role to reduce and then removing smoking in our soceity.

in conclusion, our country developed when our youth can completly rid the smoking. when peoples health cannot damage then they work properly and our country becaome a developing country.it si very important for our soceity.please make some rules and the follow for every people otherwisse you can take a some money and take a punsihment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position in favor of banning smoking. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you provide personal anecdotes about your grandfather, these are not fully integrated into a structured argument. The essay lacks a formal academic tone, and the arguments regarding economic and social impacts are mentioned but not sufficiently expanded upon. To improve, you should focus on developing each paragraph with a clear topic sentence, supporting evidence, and a concluding thought, ensuring that your arguments are presented in a more formal and objective manner suitable for an IELTS Task 2 essay.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a clear organizational structure. Paragraphing is inconsistent, and there is a lack of logical progression between ideas. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, making the flow of the text disjointed. For example, the transition between the general health risks and your personal experience with your grandfather is abrupt. To achieve a higher band, you must use linking words and phrases (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition') to connect your ideas and ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed theme.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'dangerous', 'bad', and 'problem'. There are also frequent spelling errors, such as 'prolems', 'encomic', 'soceity', and 'punsihment', which occasionally impede readability. The use of informal phrasing like 'kindly parents should eyes on children' is inappropriate for an academic essay. To improve, you should aim to incorporate more precise, topic-specific vocabulary related to public health and government policy, and pay closer attention to accurate spelling and word formation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The grammar is characterized by frequent errors in sentence structure, punctuation, and subject-verb agreement. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as 'its can effect other peoples which can stay a smoking people.' There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the frequent misuse of articles and verb tenses makes the text difficult to follow at times. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practice using a wider variety of grammatical structures, such as relative clauses and conditional sentences.

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