Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal i totaly agree with this statement.This statement is really true smoking is very dangerous to health and society it is also challenging for family and children.Smoking should be made illagal because it is very harmful for surrondings and culture.Smoking cause many problems and diseases.Some diseases are following

lung cancer,skin cancer and diabetes etc.

Lung cancer is very busy disease of smoking it is very challenging for patients it makes the man fully dull and powerless the body becomes very lose and way of breathing becomes very difficult due to lung cancer patient can easily breath so he goes on vantilator for artificial breathing.Lung cancer is very bad disease it is commonly accur due to smoking we should avoid smoking from the cure of lung cancer. Skin cancer is also done by smoking as we see on smoking aids or smoking items the photos of skin cancer patients are displayed which shows us it's consequences.When smokers have high amount of smoking the nicotine and tar located in cigarette collect in blood which causes skin cancer that hits the mouth and feet of the patients.Diabetes is also a major disease due to smoking mostly smokers have diabetes because it attact on blood cells and stop them to produce natural insulin in the lack of insulin production it causes diabetes.These diseases are commonly held by smoking we should prevent from smoking.

Smoking must be made illegal for the welfare of society and families in future.When the children see their elders during smoking their interest also build to have smoking which is very much injurious for them.So, for betterment of society and culture future smoking must be illegal

Example that i experienced is my neighborhood uncle who started smoking in his younger age but he suffered in very problems and diseases he experienced the diabetes due to smoking his health became very dull and bad due to smoking all his and his family saving were served on his health after some betterment in his health he left the smoking now his health is good and nowadays he is social activist against smoking.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of banning smoking. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive and relies heavily on listing health consequences rather than exploring the broader social or economic arguments for a ban. While the personal example of the 'neighborhood uncle' is relevant, the explanation of how smoking causes diabetes is scientifically inaccurate and lacks depth. To reach a higher band, you should focus on developing more sophisticated arguments regarding the role of government, public health policy, and the balance between personal freedom and societal welfare, rather than focusing primarily on medical descriptions.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is often interrupted by awkward phrasing and a lack of cohesive devices. Transitions between sentences are frequently missing or mechanical (e.g., 'Some diseases are following...'). The use of referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks a clear topic sentence followed by supporting evidence. Improving the use of linking words such as 'furthermore,' 'consequently,' and 'in addition' would significantly enhance the readability and logical flow of your arguments.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are several instances of word-choice errors and non-standard collocations, such as 'busy disease,' 'body becomes very lose,' and 'commonly held by smoking.' These errors sometimes impede the clarity of your message. You rely on basic descriptors like 'very bad' or 'very dangerous' throughout the text. To improve, you should focus on learning topic-specific collocations related to public health and policy, and work on using more precise adjectives and verbs to convey your points more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation, such as 'Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal i totaly agree with this statement.' There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the errors in basic grammar often distract the reader. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that each sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions.

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