Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays many people they are smoking day-by-day in their life. However, the smoking can causes serious illness problems and also destroyed there mouth and some body pats like causing a cancer and damage the rips of our body. I partially agree from the given statement.

To begin with, many citizens that today they are smoking and creating a big issues in there life. although same so as to, the youngster also smoking and eating a pan masala and cigarette. nevertheless, many adults also today there lifestyle in ended then also they are smoking. in addition, to leave a beneficial life they are destroying due to, smoking. For Instance, in INDIA many parents smoking and eating a pan masala in front of their child and the same kind of behavior kinds also initiate smoking and drinking alcohol.

on the flip side, in many out of the country that providing a alcohol and smoking in public area. so people can easily taken all the illnesses iteam. For Example, in many states the Government are giving the opportunity to sale these product to the many urban area, Moreover, specially a person on a weekend they smoking a lost of in the house. Finally, they are taking not serious to smoking and drinking alcohol. Therefor in many country students also smoking more to get relaxed there life owing to busy routine.

To Conclusion. all the Overall state Governments, should had stop all the danger causing issues and also citizenship have to not bought these products so there life become a more beneficial.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by expressing a partial agreement, but the development of ideas is limited and often unclear. While you mention health risks and the role of government, the arguments lack depth and logical progression. For instance, the transition from discussing parents in India to the availability of products in other countries is disjointed. The position is stated in the introduction, but it is not consistently maintained or supported throughout the body paragraphs. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed argument that directly supports your stance, providing clear explanations rather than just listing observations.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow of ideas is frequently interrupted by confusing phrasing and a lack of logical transitions. While you attempt to use cohesive devices like 'To begin with' and 'on the flip side', they are often used incorrectly or do not accurately reflect the relationship between sentences. Referencing is also problematic; for example, 'the same kind of behavior kinds' is unclear. The progression of ideas is not always logical, making it difficult for the reader to follow your argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring clear topic sentences would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate, which frequently impedes communication. There are many instances of incorrect word choice, such as 'illnesses iteam', 'damage the rips', and 'citizenship have to not bought'. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to express complex ideas precisely. Spelling errors are also frequent (e.g., 'there' instead of 'their', 'Therefor' instead of 'Therefore'). To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning collocations and using more precise academic vocabulary. Avoid repeating simple words and try to expand your range to include more specific terms related to health and public policy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often make the text difficult to understand. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the smoking can causes'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as 'in addition, to leave a beneficial life they are destroying due to, smoking.' The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions and articles. Proofreading for common errors like 'there/their' and verb tense consistency is essential.

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