Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

somking is very dangerous activity which can be very dangerous for our health and make us ill because it make our lungs damage and may be become a cause of cancer

smokings are have different ways like ciggrates vapes and different other items were be availabe in market which are selling regularly

In ciggrates there are less amount of nicotine but there massive amount of tobbaco which are more unhealthy for our health

in today century small kid were are addict to smoking and they do smoking and keep their activity private which are not good for them to use smoking items in our country they are totally ban in shops to sell smoking items to childrens who are not 18+ so this can major implement for the small kids and they can not smoke but our goverment would have to totally baned on smoking to save life of our country peoples

because if you do smoking daily then it can damage your lung and become the cause of lung cancer so goverment totally banned the making of smoking item so people can not lose her life and live healthy life

i have an major example my cousin who do smoking regluraly and after two to three month he become ill and we take to him towards doctor so when the test report came doctor tell him that they have a serious lung cancer and he is at last stage we all become very sad and came in tension and after 2 weeks he died and all the family is so sad because he is the younger child but due to small mistake of smooking he lose her life

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position that smoking should be banned. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you provide a personal anecdote about a cousin, the essay lacks a broader discussion of the economic or social implications of a total ban, which is expected in an academic task. The arguments are repetitive, focusing primarily on health risks without exploring the 'extent' of your agreement or considering counter-arguments. To improve, ensure you provide a more balanced and structured exploration of the topic, moving beyond personal experience to include societal or governmental perspectives.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks clear paragraphing, appearing as a single block of text. This makes it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of your argument. There is a lack of cohesive devices; sentences are often linked by simple conjunctions like 'and' or 'because' rather than sophisticated transition words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'however'). The logical flow is hindered by the absence of clear topic sentences for each paragraph. To improve, organize your ideas into distinct paragraphs: an introduction, two body paragraphs with clear supporting points, and a conclusion. Use linking phrases to connect your ideas more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, with frequent errors in word choice and spelling (e.g., 'somking', 'ciggrates', 'tobbaco', 'regluraly'). You rely on a limited set of words to describe health issues. While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of precision and the high frequency of spelling errors significantly impact the quality of the writing. To reach a higher band, you should work on expanding your vocabulary related to health, government policy, and social issues, and pay closer attention to the correct spelling of common terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede the flow of reading. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'smokings are have', 'small kid were are addict'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. The sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting complexity. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with a lack of full stops to separate distinct ideas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subjects and verbs agree, and practicing the correct use of tenses. Reducing the number of run-on sentences will greatly improve the clarity of your writing.

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