Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.
To what extent do you agree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Smoking can cause serious illness and serious health problem like cancer, gum diseases, high blood presuare, etc. I am totally agree with this because it is harmful for smokers and people around them and banning it could help to improve public health.
Nowadays, people how are depressed and in angry mind then they are smoking and relaxing there min. But it cause health diseases then also people are smoking and waste there money and time and main is there body smoking can take several changes in the smoker body. In India, Pakistan, Japan, etc countries are making cigarette and betel nut. And nowadays gen Z generation are smoking and chewing pan masala.
It is harm full for there body the cause cancer, gum diseases and high blood presure and after these
diseases they can die after some years. From smoking our lungs get damage.
= Smoking destroys health, not stress.
=Every cigarette harms your body.
=smoking may look cool, but the consequences aren't .
=smoke today, regret tomorrow.
=don't let smoking control your life.
=your health is worth more than a cigarette.
=smoking is a habit that can cost you your future.
so Goverment have to banned
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you state your position clearly, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack the necessary depth for an academic essay. The inclusion of a bulleted list of slogans is inappropriate for an IELTS Task 2 essay, as it does not constitute formal academic writing or paragraph development. To improve, you must expand your arguments with specific examples and logical explanations, ensuring each point is fully explored in complete sentences rather than fragmented lists. The response addresses the prompt but lacks the required length and depth to achieve a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a clear structure. The introduction is brief, and the body paragraphs are disjointed, relying on a list of slogans rather than cohesive, well-linked paragraphs. There is a lack of logical progression between ideas; for example, the transition from discussing stress to mentioning specific countries is abrupt and confusing. Cohesive devices are largely absent, and the use of bullet points disrupts the flow of the text. To improve, you should use clear paragraphing (introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion) and employ linking words such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition' to connect your ideas logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with several spelling errors such as 'presuare' instead of 'pressure' and 'harm full' instead of 'harmful'. You rely on simple, everyday language that does not demonstrate the range required for higher bands. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'in angry mind' and 'relaxing there min'. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to health and public policy, and practice using synonyms to avoid repetition. Accuracy in spelling and word formation is essential for conveying your ideas clearly and professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'people how are depressed' and 'Goverment have to banned'. Sentence structures are largely simple or fragmented, and there is a lack of complex sentence construction. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of bullet points and informal formatting. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and practicing the use of complex structures like relative clauses and conditional sentences. Proofreading for basic errors like 'there' versus 'their' is also highly recommended.
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