Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is argued by some that smoking can cause serious illness than other objects and smoking should be banned and also be declare it illegal in very country. Although some people believe that smoking is the main reason of lung cancer and cardiovascular disease. I strongly agree with them. my inclination is elaborated in ensuing paragraph and relevent examples.

Firstly, smoking is illegal because industries use nicotine in cigarette and this is a harmful & drug. nicotine in the it is die on well inhale and whole nicotine in the form of smoke and afterwards later on he well feel pain in his chest. Beside this, it is also true that smoking can destroy every organ of human body. when some one smoke and other person sit beside him it can be dangerous for other person. For instance, my friend used to smoke every day & in his bedroom his younger brother be cause smoking is more dangerous for passive smoker.

Further more, the other reason to prove my point is that, Cigarette companies have published mouth cancer pic off on the cigarette packet often not naturally standing some people have smoked.

On the contrary, Some people feels reckless on the mind comes in their mind the best option to reduce stress. Smoking is very appalling for their self. however and that is very appalling for their self. It is a fact cigarette reduce stress and most individuals feel worry off their conscience include them to go for smoking.

To conclude the discussion, it can be said that despite the fact of cigarette useful for anxiety and relaxing for depressed people, my reason that, smoking can one of the main factor of illness and cause of lung cancer asthma and also cardiovascular disease. These reasons are logically acceptable.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of banning smoking. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. While you mention health risks and passive smoking, the arguments are often fragmented and lack logical depth. For instance, the point about cigarette packaging is introduced but not clearly linked to the argument for a total ban. The counter-argument section is confusingly phrased, making it difficult to follow your reasoning. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on one clear, well-supported idea that directly reinforces your stance.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by unclear transitions and awkward phrasing. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Firstly' and 'To conclude', the connections between sentences are often weak or confusing, such as in the second paragraph where the transition between nicotine and passive smoking is disjointed. Referencing is also problematic; for example, the phrase 'my inclination is elaborated in ensuing paragraph' is vague. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each sentence logically follows the previous one will significantly enhance the clarity of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary range is limited and often imprecise. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'declare it illegal in very country' instead of 'every country', and 'appalling for their self' which is not standard English. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to express complex ideas accurately. To reach a higher band, focus on learning topic-specific collocations related to health and public policy, and work on using words in their correct grammatical context to avoid confusion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Some people feels'), sentence structure (e.g., 'nicotine in the it is die on well inhale'), and word order. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, making them difficult to parse. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty and lead to confusion. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subjects and verbs agree, and using punctuation correctly to separate distinct thoughts.

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