Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

i belive that smoking is harmfull for your overall health it is not good for all age pepole beacuse it is a bad addicton widespread in whole over the world.i partically because mainy pepole in india consume soke if goverment shold create law about tabacoo they cant live without soke if they want ban thios product ist we find allternative for community beacsuse widhrwal was hinious in tabaco

make some strict rules for limits if goverment shold notdeclare illegal in this modern era most of the adults consume cigrate for fun and showfull so this things creatb more bad effect on lungs

to begin with smokeing it is not gud for your lungs if you regulary inchale cigrate vape this puff effect your lungs this thing make your lungs vulnrable nd you do not run batter your phiycal ability gone for example in india most of pepole suffer with mouth caner nd othert suffer with t.v asthama due to smoke cigrates make our blood thick and afterward you suffer with high bllod presure or your emuin sytem go down in contrast some time for some indvuals take a puff they belive thats one they consume cigrate they feel happy beacuse it is only way you destress your self after a hactic day.

in cunclusion,some extand authurties shold take action on it but they first make alterrnative of cigrates then they perduce you rule beacasue do not to mucvh pepole face widhrawal goverment when ban tabaco so they automaticly encourae blackn maekit issue thats why keep on eye first salution about widhrawal then they go ahead.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the health risks of smoking and the feasibility of a ban. However, the position is somewhat inconsistent; while you argue it is harmful, you also suggest that a ban might lead to black market issues. The development of ideas is limited by frequent grammatical errors and unclear phrasing, such as 'if goverment shold create law about tabacoo they cant live without soke'. To improve, ensure your main position is clearly stated in the introduction and consistently supported throughout the essay. The arguments regarding the need for alternatives before a ban are relevant, but they require more sophisticated explanation and clearer logical flow to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is often difficult to follow due to the lack of appropriate cohesive devices and poor sentence structure. Transitions between ideas are often missing or confusing, such as the sudden shift from health risks to the 'black market' argument in the conclusion. Referencing is frequently unclear, and the internal logic within sentences is often broken, making it challenging for the reader to track your argument. To improve, focus on using linking words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'however' to connect your sentences and paragraphs more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors that occasionally impede communication (e.g., 'soke' for smoke, 'pepole' for people, 'hinious' for heinous, 'vulnrable' for vulnerable). You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to use more precise or academic terms. While you attempt to discuss complex topics like 'withdrawal' and 'black market', the spelling and word choice errors are frequent and noticeable. To improve, focus on learning the correct spelling of common academic words and try to incorporate more varied vocabulary related to health and government policy to demonstrate a wider range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

There is a lack of control over basic sentence structures, and the essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often distort meaning. Punctuation is largely absent, and there are many run-on sentences or fragments, such as 'i partically because mainy pepole in india consume soke if goverment shold create law'. Subject-verb agreement and tense usage are inconsistent throughout the text. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct subject-verb agreement, proper use of articles, and consistent verb tenses before attempting more complex structures.

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