Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Introduction

It is widely believe that smoking can cause serious illnesses .it is often argued that illegal. I can partially agree with these statement .I think smoking is injurious to health that causes many issues and unwanted affect on the health effectively.

body 1

smoking is injurious to health it causes several disease most probably is cancer that harmful to health. it affect to health directly that arises many issues such as cancer , tb ,and high chance of heartattack . particularly it is burning problem of younge generation people rapidly .example we should campaign awarness program about the smoking illness in society that learn to drawback of it.people are excessive engage in bad habit optimizely in provide them knowledge about the harmful of smoking .

body 2

smoking should be banned or renowed as illegal that related to fall in bad impact in human health.it make people damage their organ and being high risk of arises health issue and modify the younge people engage in bad habits. it used most of younge people that more harmful for health and life damage effectively.moreover maintain strict law about the control of smoking uses .excessive production of cigarette factory should be banned and allow to each of them have sealed the industry .for instance people should with concern of appropriate authority permission should banned and allow strong law about it .therefore smoking kill the people health and prohibited of smoking .

conclusion

in my perspective smoking arises many disease and affect the human health .we should maintain the strong law about to control the excessive uses of it .aware people about the smoking causes and affect must be banned and prohibited.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the health risks of smoking and the potential for a ban. However, the position is not consistently clear or well-developed. While you mention that you 'partially agree,' the arguments in the body paragraphs are repetitive and lack specific, logical development. The ideas are often stated in a fragmented way, such as 'smoking is injurious to health it causes several disease,' which prevents a deep exploration of the topic. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on one clear argument supported by a coherent explanation rather than listing general points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. There is a lack of logical progression between sentences, and the use of cohesive devices is often inaccurate or missing. For example, phrases like 'most probably is cancer' and 'therefore smoking kill the people health' do not effectively link ideas. The flow is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. Using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'consequently,' 'furthermore,' 'in contrast') would help improve the logical flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and often repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'bad,' 'harmful,' and 'issues.' There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'burning problem of younge generation' and 'renowed as illegal.' Some words are used incorrectly, such as 'optimizely' and 'sealed the industry,' which hinders clarity. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to health and legislation, and practice using these words in their correct context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'smoking kill the people'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or fragmented, such as 'it is often argued that illegal.' Punctuation is also inconsistent, with spaces missing before periods and incorrect capitalization. The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb tenses and proper punctuation, before attempting more complex structures.

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