Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Smoking is one of the most commonly growing cause of serious illnesses. Smoking is now common in every country of world. As smoking is growing so the numbers of smoker in adults as well. Many people argue that it should be illegal. While, smoker do not want this thing to banned or illegal.

However, as the number of smoker is increasing day by day and that's why it is getting common day by day in every country of world. When a person start smoking it impacts on human lungs slowly and it start making them even worse. It can be the cause of death of many smokers as well. According to a survey if a do person smoking than his life will be decrease about 10 years. It means smoking can be a cause of early death as it impacts health as well. We should take precautions in gathering as well. For example, if a person is having a cigarette in a gathering then it will impact others more than the person who is smoking.

Although, smoking is also getting common by young adults. which, can destroy their career and can cause serious health issues. The trend of smoking is growing day by day which can destroy our young generation badly. Parents should have a check on their children's activities. Which is really crucial for children's future. For example, in many countries parents have a proper check on their children's about their habits and company as well.

In conclusion, smoking should be illegal in every country. As it impact everyone health badly and can destroy them completely. And government ought to take action against this especially for adults.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The student addresses the prompt by discussing whether smoking should be made illegal and presents a clear position that it should be banned. Main ideas are introduced, such as health consequences and the impact on young people, but they are often under-developed and lack extended support. For instance, the point about passive smoking in gatherings is mentioned briefly ('if a person is having a cigarette in a gathering then it will impact others') without being fully elaborated. The argument tends to over-generalise at times, and some claims lack specific backing, though the overall stance remains clear throughout. Because the prompt is addressed with relevant ideas, it meets the criteria for Band 5.5 to 6.0, settling at 5.5 due to the limited development of main points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay has a basic organizational structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, overall progression is frequently disrupted by repetitive phrasing ('day by day', 'common in every country of world') and faulty cohesive devices. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas lacks smooth transitions—for example, shifting abruptly from health impacts to second-hand smoke, and then to parenting styles. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the pronoun use in 'Which, can destroy their career'. While the text remains readable overall, the mechanical and sometimes inaccurate use of cohesive ties places this response firmly at Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student uses a limited and repetitive vocabulary range, relying heavily on basic words like 'common', 'cause', and 'destroy'. There are frequent word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'commonly growing cause', 'if a do person smoking than his life will be decrease', and 'parents have a proper check on their children's about their habits'. These lexical shortcomings and noticeable errors cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a vocabulary profile typical of Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The writing displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, with heavy reliance on simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex clauses. Numerous grammatical errors occur throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('the numbers of smoker in adults', 'it impact everyone health'), tense errors ('when a person start smoking it impacts... and it start making'), and punctuation mistakes, such as sentence fragments ('Which, can destroy their career'). These frequent errors frequently strain the reader and restrict the score to Band 4.5.

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