Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is often claimed that , some people think smoking can cause serious illness and it will be illegal . But some people think it cause minor illness .I will partly Agree with this point smoking can cause serious illness and its many bad impact on health.

Initating with points , Firstly smoking cause in serious illness and many respiratory problems Like , Asthma , Respiratory distress Copd, pneumonia and Lung cancer . In many society use ciggrate is common habit .it can lead to healh problems and effect on people life style . Moreover , if smoking were Illegally . young people choose many healthy habits and away from smoking .Furthermore , if government take to strict acction against smoking .people are more healthy and learn good habbits . in addition , if ciggrate is permanent bain in society young age group away from it and participatein many activities and creates healthier generation in country .

Moving further ahead , smoking does no teffect smokers . it can also effect on non smokers health .Moreover , people live or work with smokers may breath harmfull because after smoking when people exhale breath it effect on non smokers society . Furthermore ,ciggrate can produce pollution and many Respiratory problems . In addition , if ciggrate is illegal it will help to reduce stress and good health because if ciggrate is illegal people can not eassily and they cannot smoke every where it can lead to healthy society and parks and public places are healthier and safer . for inctance in community people are more healthy and prevention for serious illness .

In conclusion , I stronglly agree with , smoking is illegal.because it cause serious illness and unheallthy and some people take to it for habbit . Moreover smoking cause many respiratory related problems and some time lung cancer . in addition smoking can lead to pollution . if people stop smoking envirment and socities make healthy , clean and safe

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing whether smoking should be made illegal, taking a clear position that you partly/strongly agree. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. For instance, the argument that banning smoking would lead to healthier young people and cleaner environments is repeated across multiple paragraphs without sufficient extension or fresh examples. The reference to minor illnesses in the introduction is also contradictory and under-developed. While all parts of the prompt are touched upon, the lack of depth and the somewhat contradictory stance place this at a Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the overall logical progression is frequently disrupted by repetitive transitions and mechanical cohesive devices like 'Moving further ahead' and 'In addition'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas is somewhat disjointed—for example, second-hand smoke and environmental pollution are mixed in with other points rather than being clearly separated into a distinct thematic paragraph. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the mechanical repetition of phrases ('if ciggrate is illegal') negatively impacts the flow. This fits the Band 5.0 descriptors for inadequate and repetitive use of cohesive devices.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'ciggrate', 'healh', 'habbits', 'acction', and 'envirment'. There are attempts at topic-specific vocabulary ('respiratory problems', 'lung cancer', 'second hand'), but word choice and collocation errors are frequent ('permanent bain', 'take to it for habbit'). Vocabulary control is strained throughout the response, meaning the lexical resource aligns closely with Band 4.5 to 5.0 descriptors, specifically meriting a Band 5.0 for a limited, minimally adequate range that causes some difficulty for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on conditional 'if' clauses that are frequently ungrammatical or structurally incomplete (e.g., 'if smoking were Illegally', 'if ciggrate is permanent bain'). Punctuation errors are widespread, including spaces before commas and missing periods. Simple sentences often contain basic errors, and complex structures are frequently faulty. The high frequency of grammatical errors causes constant difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 4.0 descriptor well.

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