Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Smoking is a great hazard to human life. It can cause serious illnesses. It has negative impact on physical as well as mental health of a person. Smokers roughly spend half lives than non smokers. The activity of smoking is taken for granted and starts with mere adventure or peer pressure; but it often leads towards disasterous endings. It should be made illegal by every state and strong awarness campaigns should be started to save nations from this curse.

Firstly, smoking any drug can lead to serious helth issues. It badly effects kidneys of smokers. Kidneys of a smoker turns black and loses its efficency upto many folds. Also, it lead to many respiratory issues and dieseases from mere Asthma to Wind pipe cancer. Furthermore, smoking can cause high blood pressure, fatique, liver issues and it also effects fertility of a person. Additionally, smoking weed can cause more serious problems. Importantly, even passive smokers suffers from serious health hazards if subjected frequently to smoke of tobacco or weed.

Smoking can also cause serious mental health issues. It can cause a person to circulate their whole exixtence around it. Specifically, smoking Weed or other drugs may make you an addict. It may starts from just adventure with fellows at Vape cafe but the habit may leave you at drug rehab center eventually.

Therefore, smoking any kind of drug should be made illegal. There should be worldwide compaings against smoking and strict punishments should be given to users as well as dealers. A nation mentally and physically weak by smoking can not progress well. To make world an innovation hug with peace and prosperity, we need sound minds and bodies who can contribute significantly to progess of our globe.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear stance that smoking should be made illegal due to its severe health and societal impacts. The writer covers both physical and mental health consequences, providing relevant supporting arguments such as respiratory issues, addiction, and the impact on passive smokers. However, some ideas are stated rather than fully developed, such as the claim that smokers spend 'half lives than non smokers', which lacks factual support or deep explanation. The position is maintained throughout the essay, and the conclusion succinctly reiterates the main thesis. Overall, the task is addressed adequately with a clear point of view, corresponding to a Band 6.0 level of development and task coverage.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a clear paragraph structure dividing the introduction, physical health, mental health, and conclusion. Cohesive devices are used to signal progression, such as 'Firstly', 'Furthermore', 'Additionally', and 'Therefore'. However, the referencing and connection between sentences can sometimes feel mechanical or slightly abrupt, as seen in the sudden shift from tobacco to weed in the second paragraph. Paragraphing is used appropriately to group related ideas, but logical flow within paragraphs occasionally lacks smooth transitions. This fits the Band 6 descriptor where cohesion is sometimes faulty or mechanical.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common words such as 'disasterous', 'fatique', and 'prosperity'. However, there are noticeable spelling errors throughout the text, including 'disasterous' (disastrous), 'awarness' (awareness), 'helth' (health), 'effects' instead of affects in several instances, 'fatique' (fatigue), 'suffers' (suffer), 'exixtence' (existence), 'compaings' (campaigns), and 'hug' (hub). Word choice is occasionally imprecise, such as 'circulate their whole exixtence around it'. While communication is not impeded, these lexical and spelling inaccuracies restrict the score to Band 5.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response features a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating attempts at varied structures such as conditional and relative clauses. There are, however, frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Examples include 'Smokers roughly spend half lives than non smokers' (missing article and incorrect comparative structure), 'Kidneys of a smoker turns black and loses its efficency' (subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference issues), and 'passive smokers suffers' (subject-verb agreement). Punctuation and capitalization are generally acceptable, but grammatical slips are recurrent enough to prevent the writing from reaching a higher band. These errors correspond to a Band 5.5 performance.

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