Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In 1966 at cape town South Africa, sir France kindlt spoke that the three basic needs of all human being are not food, shelter and clothing but needs of all human being are freedom, education, and health. The world improve the same arguments would be believed. But when touching the issue of health, it blows up heated counter arial opinion among the people, but a bunch demanding that smoking can be a source of dangerous diseases and it should be declear crime, while others comdemn this statement. However, scientific reasearch has shown that smoking can cause many serious sickness such as cancer, chest diseases and many more, as well as it can also effect the mental health. This essay will analyze both these aspects before any conclusion could be drawn.

The most fundamental justification is that, smoking can be the foundation of various life-threatening diseases, such as cancer, problems in breathing, chest diseases etc. As a result, the rate of life-threatening diseases are rapidly increased, many people are facing these diseases and spend lots of money in such diseases.

The second cosiderable aspect is that, smoking can cause psycological problem, which can destroy person's mental health, which lead to depression, anxiety and other psycological problems.

On another plif, some individuals deny the above statements by saying that it is a personal choice of everyone and one one should implement any law which challenge the someone's personal rights and if such laws are implement it can lead to many social and personal problems.

Following the above analyzations, the most effective way to address this issue is that government shoud band smoking and all others addictive substance which can be the cause of such deadly diseases, and can take someone's lives.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both sides of whether smoking should be made illegal and presents a clear position. The introduction outlines the argument, and body paragraphs present reasons such as life-threatening diseases, respiratory problems, and psychological impacts. There is also a paragraph representing the opposing view that it is a personal choice. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive, particularly in the body paragraphs where sentences like 'smoking can be the foundation of various life-threatening diseases' merely restate the prompt without deep extension or specific supporting examples. The conclusion clearly states the writer's stance. According to the band descriptors, this performance aligns best with Band 5.5, rounded to 5.0 for limited and under-developed ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay displays some overall organization, attempting an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the progression of ideas lacks clarity, and paragraphing is poorly managed. For instance, the second and third body paragraphs are very brief and repetitive, consisting largely of single sentences that could be combined. Cohesive devices are frequently inadequate, inaccurate, or mechanical, such as the awkward transition 'On another plif'. Furthermore, referencing and logical flow are disrupted by frequent grammatical and mechanical errors, making the transitions between ideas unclear at times. This reflects the characteristics of Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student uses a limited vocabulary with noticeable errors that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. There are numerous spelling, word choice, and collocation errors throughout the text, such as 'cape town' (capitalization), 'kindlt' (kindly), 'declear' (declare), 'comdemn' (condemn), 'reasearch' (research), 'effect' (affect), 'cosiderable' (considerable), 'psycological' (psychological), 'plif' (cliff/part), 'band' (ban), and 'substance' (substances). While the writer attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'life-threatening' and 'justification', the high frequency of lexical and spelling errors restricts the effective communication of ideas, placing this response firmly in the Band 5.0 category.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, articles, punctuation, and sentence structure. Examples include 'the three basic needs of all human being are', 'The world improve the same arguments would be believed', 'the rate of life-threatening diseases are rapidly increased', and 'one one should implement any law which challenge the someone's personal rights'. Many complex sentence structures are faulty and obscure meaning. Punctuation is also problematic, with long, run-on sentences connected by commas rather than proper conjunctions or full stops. These persistent errors match the Band 5.0 descriptors.

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