Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the contempary world, smoking is illeagal and prohibited human habit and it is cause for the serious health cases in the human beangs. Since it is illegal product who is using or selling for the people.

First and formost, cigorat is made by using dryied plant base leaves but there have high nicotinic value. Nicotine is highly body stimulating drug and it is directly affect by the lungs when they are suckimng of the nicotinated gas. So that nicotine gas imediatly absorbe the blood and nicotine, carbon dioxide and oxygen attache the blood cells. These nicotinated blood cells are pump to the whole body and stimulate. For the example, who is smokes two or more than cigorats per time we can see a symptemps like this person blide there eyes and drausiness. Ferthermore, Nicotinic gas is carcinogenic ingrediant fo the human beangs and few years ago the smoked person body grows the cancer cells.

Secondly, the when they are smoking regulaly lungs cells called alviols are damge because these alviols are very sencitive for deattache the carbon dioxyde and attache the oxygen to the blood cells. In this case, smoking persons lungs are parturly died and it is not performing effectively. For the example, smoking peaple cannot do their sport due to they cannot breath highly and body oxyegen level is go down. In additionally, smorking is also helps to reduce the human fertility and born the unhelthy child or dead child.

In conlusion, smorking is bad habbit for the living animals for incerasing the unhealthy persons and high in cancer pesions in the hospitals. So that is why smoking is unhealthy habit and illigal drug for using.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The candidate addresses the prompt by taking a clear position that smoking is harmful and should be prohibited. Main ideas are presented regarding the physiological effects of nicotine, lung damage, and broader health consequences such as fertility and cancer. However, the development of these ideas is limited and somewhat repetitive, especially when discussing the medical mechanisms. While the student attempts to provide examples, such as the physiological symptoms of smoking, the explanations remain underdeveloped and lack analytical depth. The position is maintained throughout the response, but the support lacks the nuance and extension expected at higher band levels. Consequently, this performance aligns closely with Band 5.5 to 6.0 descriptors, showing a straightforward attempt to answer the prompt with relevant, though basic, supporting details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay is divided into an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, demonstrating a basic awareness of paragraphing. However, logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. While the writer uses signposting expressions like 'First and formost' and 'Secondly', the internal cohesion within paragraphs is often faulty. For instance, referencing words such as 'they' and 'these' is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to follow the logical links between sentences. The conclusion attempts to summarise the main points, but the overall progression lacks fluidity. These coherence and cohesion issues reflect the characteristics of a Band 5.0 response.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The student attempts to use some subject-specific terminology, such as 'nicotine', 'carcinogenic', 'alviols' (alveoli), and 'fertility'. However, the lexical range is severely constrained by persistent spelling errors and inappropriate word choices. Examples of non-standard spelling and vocabulary include 'contempary' (contemporary), 'illeagal' (illegal), 'cigorat' (cigarette), 'suckimng' (sucking), and 'pesions' (patients). There are also numerous collocation errors, such as 'harmful habit' instead of correctly applied natural phrases. While the meaning is generally retrievable despite the vocabulary constraints, the frequency of lexical errors places this performance firmly at Band 4.5 to 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying primarily on simple sentences and flawed attempts at complex clauses. Grammatical accuracy is low throughout the response, with pervasive errors in subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and article selection. Examples include phrases like 'smoking is illeagal and prohibited human habit and it is cause for the serious health cases', 'who is smokes two or more than cigorats', and 'smoking peaple cannot do their sport due to they cannot breath highly'. These frequent errors frequently strain the reader and obscure meaning, matching the criteria for Band 4.0.

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