Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

smoking is the most dangerous for the health because of smoking people suffer from various types of disease so it should be made illegal.

According to my percpective , i strongly agreed with this smoking should be also banned .

To begin with this , smoking is the very dangerous for health . it is a very harmful because of this masses suffer from heart and liver or many more disease and fragile the internal parts of our body . secondly , smoking harms also the other person who also donot smoke . to more elaborate this , when smokers smoke then who is sitting with that person or who is surronding there also effect from that smoke because that smoke is very harmful .

There are also several reason to banned the smoking . like this is also a cause of air pollution and healthy people also unknowlingly consume that smoke and they also get effect . last but not least , its smell is also too dirty sometime another masses can take a breathe easily . for intance , personaly i can not take breathe easilt when smokers are near me also who smoking and they also have dark pigmentation on their lips as well face . so there are internal and external effect on the body so its too harmfull . it should be banned and there also renowed personality who promote this also do advertise of the smoking so it gives the very wrong impact on the young generation who inspire the from the famous persons and elders .

in this conclusion , smoking should be banned and illegal because of this step people cannot do smoking also cannot purchase this product .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the prompt regarding whether smoking should be made illegal due to its health risks. A clear position is stated: 'i strongly agreed with this smoking should be also banned.' Ideas are presented, such as health consequences, passive smoking, air pollution, and the influence of celebrities on the young generation. However, these ideas are largely under-developed and lack extension. The reasoning remains basic, relying on repetitive points like 'it is very harmful' without offering deeper analysis or well-supported arguments. Examples provided, such as personal difficulty breathing, are anecdotal and underdeveloped rather than academic evidence. While all parts of the prompt are touched upon, the lack of thorough development places this response firmly at Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response attempts basic paragraphing, separating the introduction, body points, and a brief conclusion, although formatting is erratic. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often mechanical, repetitive, or inappropriately linked (e.g., 'To begin with this', 'to more elaborate this', 'last but not least'). Furthermore, progression is sometimes obscured by abrupt shifts in ideas, such as jumping from passive smoking to air pollution and then to celebrity endorsements within the same paragraph. Paragraphing is not consistently managed to guide the reader logically through distinct arguments. Referencing is occasionally unclear, leading to a choppy flow. Overall, the organizational structure displays some clear attempts at cohesion, but these are frequently inaccurate or over-used, fitting the Band 5 profile.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is quite basic and repetitive throughout the essay. Words like 'dangerous', 'harmful', 'health', and 'smoke' are used repeatedly without much variation. There are attempts at less common vocabulary items (e.g., 'pigmentation', 'renowned personality', 'unknowingly'), but these are often marred by inappropriate collocations or word choices (e.g., 'masses suffer', 'take a breathe easily', 'inspire the from'). Spelling and word-form errors are noticeable ('percpective', 'agreed', 'surronding', 'unknowlingly', 'easilt'), though they do not completely impede overall communication. The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate for expressing basic thoughts, corresponding to a Band 5 score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple sentences and basic coordination. Where complex structures are attempted, they are frequently faulty and contain frequent structural errors (e.g., 'smoking is the most dangerous for the health because of smoking people suffer...'). There are fundamental issues with punctuation, capitalization (e.g., lowercase 'i', random spacing before commas), and verb tense consistency. Grammatical errors are frequent throughout the text, including missing articles, incorrect prepositions, and faulty subject-verb agreement. These errors frequently cause strain and difficulty for the reader, aligning with the descriptors for Band 4.5 to 5.0; a score of 5.0 reflects the occasional successful simple structure.

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