Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

smoking is one of major health problem in the world althrough all people knows about its effect but they smoke on daily base because of there habities millions of people on dailu base affected by smoking but are not conern about it

firstly smoking cause serious health cause problem regularly smoking cause lungs failure issue because of which people cannot breathe properly it can also cause cancer which effect all body at that time we feel good after but we dont know but going to be happen with us it can also effect those people around smokers because they may be exposed to second hand smoke or may be they are soon going to be addicated by them there are millions of smoker into inthe world but no buddy concern about its diseases

there are several ways to stop smoking if any wants to stop governments also need to take action on its otherwise it will destroy over in coming generation it will start in colleges and than into schools governments need to introduce strict law on the developer of all these smoking items furthermore schools and health organizations should need to educate students and its not good for there help and destroy there body and mind if they get addicted

in conclusion smoking is inguries to health has cause serious health cause that we dont feel at the time of smoking but its destroying our body internal or externaly health is important for us without we are not be able to drink a cup of water

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt regarding whether smoking should be made illegal. A clear position is taken, arguing that smoking causes serious health issues and that governments should intervene. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. For instance, the discussion on health consequences ('smoking cause serious health cause problem regularly smoking cause lungs failure') lacks specific, well-supported arguments or examples, relying instead on broad generalizations. While the task is addressed, the ideas are under-developed and lack the depth expected for a higher band. Consequently, the performance aligns best with Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The essay lacks fundamental cohesive devices and proper punctuation, which severely disrupts the logical flow. The entire text is essentially a single massive block of run-on sentences without capital letters or full stops ('smoking is one of major health problem in the world althrough all people knows about its effect...'). Paragraphing is poorly handled, and cohesive links between sentences are missing or inaccurate. Although there is a discernible overall structure attempting an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, the lack of basic punctuation and cohesive control places this performance firmly at Band 4.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily impacted by spelling errors. Words are frequently misspelled ('habities' for habits, 'dailu' for daily, 'conern' for concerned, 'addicated' for addicted, 'inguries' for injurious, 'externaly' for externally). The range of vocabulary is limited, and attempts at less common words result in frequent inaccuracies that often strain the reader's understanding. While the topic is identifiable, the lexical limitations and pervasive spelling mistakes prevent the response from achieving a Band 5, anchoring it at Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical structure is severely compromised by the complete absence of punctuation and capitalization. The text consists of run-on clauses linked loosely without appropriate conjunctions or sentence boundaries. There is a very limited range of accurate sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are faulty. Frequent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and word forms ('smoking cause serious health cause') cause substantial difficulty for the reader and significantly distort meaning in several places, meeting the criteria for Band 4.

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