Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

one of the major health consern is smoking where it causes a serious damage to the internal parts who smoke regurally. moreover it was available every where without any limitations while authorities should take action and make it illegal business. i completely agree with the statement and i would like to discuss regarding it.

in the present world where smoke is the one of the major consern which causing serious problems to the health to many individuals who got habituated to it. moreover it not only causing damage to his/her health it distrubing environmental and public surroundings. for instance In recent article from a survey found that many of the shopkeepers are selling these things illegally and without any rules and regulations like available in public places and most crouded streers.

furthermore there is no action taken by higher authorities regarding it whereas there is no limitations, awareness programmes and advartisements regardind it. officials should take serious action regarding it like spreading causes when they usually having it. Like make serious damage to the respiratory system where it distrubs the whole family because of one. For example in mumbai govt had impossed a serious action on cegirate sellers and restricted to the public places. however due to lack of availability many individuals stopped smoking.

i completely agree with the statement where it causes a serious health issues and further government should take serious actions regarding it and spread awareness.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the task partially, as the overall word count falls short of the minimum requirement of 250 words, stopping at 239 words. Your position is presented from the outset when you state that 'i completely agree with the statement', but the ideas remain limited and under-developed. While you attempt to provide reasons and examples, such as mentioning shopkeepers selling items illegally and referencing an action in Mumbai, these points lack depth and clear explanation. To reach a higher level, you must fully develop your ideas with extended explanations and relevant examples, while ensuring you meet the minimum word length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation evident in your writing, and you attempt to structure your ideas into paragraphs, but there is no clear overall progression throughout the essay. The connections between sentences and paragraphs often feel repetitive or mechanical. For instance, the transition 'moreover' is overused and cohesive devices are sometimes inadequate or inaccurate, making it difficult for the reader to follow a smooth logical flow. Additionally, referencing is occasionally unclear, such as pronoun usage referring back to nouns. To improve, you should focus on logical sequencing, using a wider and more accurate variety of cohesive ties, and ensuring each paragraph builds clearly on the previous one.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task, with noticeable errors that may occasionally cause some difficulty for the reader. There are multiple spelling and word-choice inaccuracies, such as 'consern', 'regurally', 'advartisements', 'regardind', 'cegirate', and 'impossed'. These errors reflect an inadequate control over word forms and spelling. You attempt to use some less common vocabulary, but these attempts often result in unnatural collocation or incorrect spelling. To achieve a higher band score, you need to expand your lexical range, improve your spelling accuracy, and select more precise words and collocations appropriate for academic writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The text displays a limited range of sentence structures, relying heavily on simple constructions, while attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty. There are frequent errors in grammar, punctuation, and capitalization, such as missing capital letters at the beginning of sentences and proper nouns like 'mumbai', incorrect article usage, and flawed verb forms (e.g., 'where it causes', 'it not only causing', 'when they usually having it'). These frequent errors can cause some difficulty and strain for the reader. To progress, you need to demonstrate a greater variety of complex structures with improved accuracy, paying closer attention to subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and basic sentence boundaries.

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