Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some people, think that smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be mada illegal or ban by the government. according to my view point they say absulitely wright because smoking crase in youngsters increasing day by day, and it cause serious health problem such as cancer, asstama, lungs problem and breathing problems it also prevent air pollution.

nowadays, smoking crase and hebits are increase day by day in youngsters because of this hebits they suffering for serious health issues in long term such as cancer it is a dangerous health problem it cause death also. when person smoking cigrates, vage, and hooka for long time it also cause lungs problem and they suffer from breathing.

In smoking habits person spend lots of money in every year in fact they use this money for good habits such as for cherity, health, and for family. smoker people kill their own health by smoking and also affect healty near by person when they smoking. it also prevent air pollution because of smoking, smoker people think they make little amount of smoke but there are millions of people who smoking daily. so it is important to take an action to stop smoking culture in youngsters.

conclusion, stop smoking get good health and stay safe form serious health issues such as cancer, lung problem and breathing problems and also give good healts to society. use your money for good use like chearity, for good like and for family. don't make air pollution make clean air from dust and harm full gases.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the task only partially, as it is 2 words short of the 250-word minimum (excluding 8 words copied from the prompt). The writer presents a clear position that smoking should be made illegal due to health risks, but the ideas remain limited and under-developed. For instance, the mention of 'air pollution' is confused, as the writer paradoxically suggests that smoking 'prevent[s] air pollution' before later stating they 'don't make air pollution'. Supporting arguments regarding financial waste and health issues lack sufficient extension and rely on repetitive assertions rather than deep elaboration. To move to a higher band, the response must meet the minimum word count and fully develop all supporting ideas with clear explanations and relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation with attempts at paragraphing, but the response lacks a clear overall progression. Paragraph boundaries are somewhat arbitrary, and the final paragraph functions as an abrupt list-like conclusion rather than a cohesive summary of main points. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, and at times inaccurate, such as using 'according to my view point they say absulitely wright' as a transition, which fails to link ideas smoothly. Pronoun referencing is also occasionally unclear, leaving the reader to guess what terms like 'they' refer to in certain contexts. To achieve a higher score, the writer needs to logically sequence ideas, use a wider and more accurate range of cohesive devices, and ensure smooth transitions between paragraphs.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for the task, featuring noticeable errors in spelling, word form, and word choice that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. Examples of non-standard forms include 'mada', 'absulitely', 'wright', 'crase' (craze), 'asstama' (asthma), 'cigrates', 'vage' (vape), 'hooka', 'hebits', 'healty', and 'chearity'. While the writer attempts less common topics related to health and lifestyle, the frequent lexical errors impede fluent reading. To progress to a higher band, the student must expand their vocabulary range, improve spelling accuracy, and use words with correct collocation and form, such as 'habits' instead of 'hebits' and 'asthma' instead of 'asstama'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response demonstrates a very limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent errors in complex constructions. There are persistent mistakes in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and word order, such as 'when person smoking cigrates... it also cause lungs problem', 'smoker people kill their own health', and 'smoking crase... are increase day by day'. Punctuation is also problematic, particularly run-on sentences and comma splices, such as 'conclusion, stop smoking get good health...'. These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader. To improve, the writer needs to demonstrate better control over basic sentence patterns, ensure correct verb forms and subject-verb agreement, and use punctuation accurately.

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