Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It has been observed that smoking habit increased in this modern era. It is a major problem in these days.I find the given notion logically sound. My veiws regarding the statement to be greater extent. I will highlight these points in the subsequent paragraphs, which will lead to the logical conclusion.

To commence with, in this modern era humam running after to earn more money, they have not time to spend with their family. To elaborate it,this is a main reason teenagers start smoking in their early age. For instance, a survey was conducted by' The World Health Care Department' in 2024 and revealed that 90% people start smoking in their school or college time becaue they have stress and feel alone.

The second reason to prove my point that parents do not take care of their children. To explane it, if parents should guide their kids good or bad habits and aviod smoking infrant of them, along with this, friends circle also plays an important role in people's lives.Parents should visit the school and talk to teacher and friends then is possible they will avoid the smoking habit. For example, a headline was published by 'The Global News' in 2025 and showed that 70% children have smoking habit who's parents have busy scheduale and do not spend tin=me with their kids.

To conclude the discussion it can be said despite the fact that smoking product should banned by the government and aware the people from effect of smoking through the advertisement.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a position—“I find the given notion logically sound”—and give reasons related to teenagers’ smoking, parental guidance and peer influence. However, the response only partially addresses the central question: whether smoking should be made illegal. Most of the discussion explains why young people begin smoking, rather than weighing prohibition against other approaches or explaining why a ban is justified. The final sentence briefly calls for a government ban and public awareness, but does not develop either proposal. The survey and news examples are relevant to smoking, yet their connection to making smoking illegal is not explained. To strengthen the response, keep your position explicit and develop reasons specifically about the proposed law, such as its likely effects and possible limitations.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “To commence with,” “The second reason” and “To conclude” make the intended structure visible. The two body paragraphs also separate ideas about teenagers and parental influence. However, progression is limited because the paragraphs do not consistently connect their points back to the question of legality. Some links are mechanical or unclear: “To elaborate it” and “To explain it” introduce explanations, but the relationship between parental work schedules, school contact and avoiding smoking is difficult to follow. The conclusion introduces a ban and advertising without drawing together the earlier discussion. Use clearer topic sentences and explain how each example supports your argument about making smoking illegal.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “smoking habit,” “stress,” “government” and “advertisement,” and attempt more formal expressions such as “logically sound” and “subsequent paragraphs.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “human running after to earn more money” and “avoid the smoking habit” do not express the intended ideas naturally; “smoking infrant of them” also obscures the point. Spelling errors such as “veiw,” “becaue” and “scheduale” further reduce clarity. Build a more precise range for discussing legislation and public health, and check spelling and collocations when revising.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional structure beginning “if parents should guide their kids,” and use basic sequencing to organise the response. However, the range is limited, and attempts at complex sentences are often faulty. Examples include “My views regarding the statement to be greater extent,” which lacks a complete grammatical structure, and “The second reason to prove my point that parents do not take care of their children,” which is also incomplete. Agreement and verb forms are problematic in “smoking habit increased” and “parents have busy schedule,” while punctuation is inconsistent, with missing spaces after full stops and commas. Practise complete clauses, accurate verb forms and sentence boundaries; these changes would make your ideas easier to understand.

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