Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

smooking is very common in today era for example some people smoke to reduce strees ,some become addicted to smoking .But it cause serious disease for people it cause lungs problems and also cause cancer.

Our young generation is more addicted to smoking.

youth is very important for every nation

smoking should be illegal .It does not only effect the people who is smoking but also effect the health of the people who sit next to them .

Health is more important than any other thing .Smoking should be completely ban so no one can use it .

It cause many heart disease ,cough ,stoke . But unfortunately people are ignoring these disease and use many cigarates daily.

The perfect example to share my family experience there was a young man who is completely adicted to smoking . Smokig is important for him rather then food.

He said that he can live with out food but not with out smoking .He refuse to stop smoking . And the consequences leads him to death . His lungs were fully damaged . He could not take breathe properly in his last stage of life .In his early twenties he lost his life .

This was a great trauma for his mother .Smoking should be banned so we can save the life of our young generation and prevent them from serious disease.

cigarettes contain harmfull chemicals which damage lungs easily. Government have to spend a large amount of his money treating diseases cause by smoking . Therefore, both individuals and governments should work together to reduce smoking and promote a healthier lifestyle.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you agree that smoking should be illegal, and you give relevant reasons, including harm to smokers and people nearby, health costs, and a personal example of a young man whose smoking contributed to severe lung damage. This addresses the main question and gives the response a clear purpose. However, some points are asserted rather than explained: for example, the claim that smoking should be completely banned would benefit from discussion of how a ban could work or what challenges it might create. The health effects and government costs are also mentioned briefly. Develop these ideas with explanation and evidence, and make the link between each reason and your position more explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an identifiable line of argument, moving from the prevalence and harms of smoking to a personal example and then to government costs. The family story gives the discussion a concrete focus. However, ideas are often presented as separate short statements, and paragraphing does not clearly distinguish the main reasons. Connections such as “But,” “Therefore,” and “And” are sometimes repetitive or do not show the precise relationship between ideas. For instance, the transition from the young man’s death to the government’s spending is abrupt. Organise the response into clear paragraphs—position, supporting reasons, example, and conclusion—and use referencing and linking phrases to show how each point builds on the previous one.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “addicted,” “cancer,” “lungs,” “chemicals,” and “healthier lifestyle,” so the reader can understand the central argument. The range is nevertheless limited, with repeated use of “smoking,” “cause,” and “disease,” and several inaccurate or misspelled forms make the writing less clear, such as “smooking,” “strees,” “cigarates,” and “harmfull.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “reduce stress” in this context and “the consequences leads him to death.” Build a wider set of precise expressions for health effects and policy, and check spelling and collocations. For example, use “develop an addiction,” “second-hand smoke,” and “smoking-related illnesses” where appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You communicate your main ideas using simple sentences and make some attempts to connect clauses, for example, “It does not only effect the people who is smoking but also effect the health of the people who sit next to them.” However, sentence structures are mostly simple, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and punctuation occur throughout. Examples include “it cause,” “people who is,” “Government have,” and “He refuse.” Several sentences also run together or begin with a conjunction without clear punctuation. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and past-tense forms, and combine related ideas using controlled complex sentences. Careful sentence boundaries and punctuation will make your argument easier to follow.

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