Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this morden world few individual belive that Smoking should be illegal and few individual say smoking is not illegal . So i will explain the about smoking is illegal or not in the up comming paragraph .

To begin with , Smoking is a primary cause of many life therating medical condition . Medical reserch has found that in smoke they made from tobacco . when we smoke the directy go inside to yours lungs and damages ex. lund cancer heart disease and very several disease . if the government made smoking illegal it would significantly protect public health and save millions of live from Diseases

In the additional treating smoking created an money maker for government tax. million of Dollar are spend in smoking behind every year by public healthcare and service to provide medical treatment for patients life from tobacco health problem.if they dont spend money on this there money will used in public transport , road etc . they benfite for all the human being behind the smooking they spend money every day . spend money on the proper way and do saving its help for furture life and its help to you only. In the morden world 15 years student are smoking its to bad for ours socity and damages to other student also. so I would say smoking will be illegal .

In conclusion I stongely belive that making smoking illegal is a necessary step for morden socity this policy would not only protect people from diseases but also reduce the heavy financial burden on the healthcare.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You take a clear position in favour of making smoking illegal, especially in the opening and conclusion, and give relevant reasons: smoking causes serious illness, creates healthcare costs, and can affect young people. This addresses the question and includes more than one supporting point. However, some ideas are less fully explained than others. The health argument names lung cancer and heart disease, but the explanation of how prohibition would reduce smoking needs more detail. The paragraph about government tax and public spending is difficult to follow, and its connection to the case for a ban is not made clear. Develop each reason with a specific explanation or example, and clarify how the financial argument supports your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure and your position. The first body paragraph focuses on health, while the next introduces financial and social concerns. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear: the discussion moves from tax revenue to healthcare costs, public transport, personal savings and students without showing how these points connect. Linking phrases such as “To begin with” and “In conclusion” help signal stages, but “In the additional” is not an effective transition, and repeated references to “smoking” and “money” do not establish clear relationships between ideas. Group related points together and use precise transitions and referencing to guide the reader through the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “primary cause,” “public health,” “financial burden” and “healthcare,” and these choices help communicate your main concerns. However, the range is limited and many spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the response difficult to understand, such as “life therating,” “morden socity” and “behind every year.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, including “an money maker for government tax” and “spend money on the proper way.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. Reusing a smaller set of clear terms is more effective than attempting phrases whose meaning is uncertain.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You use some simple sentences and attempt longer structures, for example, “If the government made smoking illegal it would significantly protect public health,” which shows an effort to express a conditional relationship. However, sentence structures are often incomplete or inaccurately formed, and errors can make meaning hard to follow. Examples include “Medical research has found that in smoke they made from tobacco,” which lacks a complete, clear clause, and “when we smoke the directy go inside to yours lungs,” where the subject, verb and possessive structure are not controlled. Agreement and articles also need attention, as in “15 years student are smoking.” Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement, articles and punctuation.

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