Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In recent years, there has been a growing debate about whether smoking should be consider illegal because it cause illness. Other argue that it is unneccesssary to emloy. I strongly agree smoking in public area should be recognize illegal because it is harmful for our body and other person.

Smoking has several disadvantages, one drawback is it are harmful for our body

it destroy the our breathing system. When we smoke any cigarate or any other material, it effect their lungs cell, their lungs are become more weaker and person face variety of lung diseases such as, asthema and lung cancer. For example, the recent survey of world healths organization reveals that 90 percent cases of lung cancer belong to smoking. Another effect of smoking is it badly effect our brain and distrub our daily sleep routine.

Another major negative aspect of smoking is it effect our environment badly. When a large number of public smoke daily in a area, it is a difficult for non smoking person to survive in this because of smoke and air pollution whic h is harmful for our health. For instance, a scientific research shows that if a peraon sit with smoking person, it effect on non smoking person are more than smking person. As a result, person face a respiratory issue. Another drawback of smoking is it consider a bad aspect of personality.

In conclusion, smoking are should be consider ban and illegel in a world because it is dangerous for our health and envionment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you agree that smoking should be prohibited, and you give relevant reasons concerning health and the effects of smoke on non-smokers. The examples about lung disease and second-hand smoke help explain these points. However, the response does not fully address the scope of the question: it focuses mainly on smoking in public places, while the prompt asks whether smoking itself should be made illegal. The claim that smoking harms the environment and the comment about personality are less clearly explained, and the survey and research examples would be more convincing with clearer detail or explanation. Clarify whether you support a complete ban or restrictions in public areas, then develop each reason with a specific explanation and relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The health effects are grouped together, followed by the impact on non-smokers, so the reader can follow the broad direction of the argument. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the point about sleep appears without being connected to the preceding discussion, and the final claim about personality does not clearly support the main argument. Linking phrases such as “Another effect” and “For instance” are used, but some connections feel mechanical or do not show the relationship between ideas precisely. Use clearer topic sentences, explain how each example supports its point, and remove or develop ideas that do not advance the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “lung diseases,” “lung cancer,” “air pollution” and “respiratory issue,” which helps communicate the subject. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “effect,” “harmful” and “another.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice problems, such as “asthma,” “environment,” “illegal” and “non-smoking,” as well as unnatural combinations like “bad aspect of personality” and “smoking person.” These sometimes make the intended meaning less clear. Build a more precise set of expressions for health risks and public policy, and check spelling and collocations. For example, “second-hand smoke” is more natural and specific than “smoke” when describing harm to non-smokers.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences using clauses such as “because” and “when,” so there is some variety in sentence structure. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction occur throughout. Examples include “smoking should be consider illegal,” “it cause illness,” “it are harmful,” and “smoking are should be consider ban.” Some sentences also have unclear or incomplete structures, as in “one drawback is it are harmful for our body,” while punctuation and sentence boundaries are not always controlled. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and verb patterns, then build longer sentences from a correct main clause. Proofreading each sentence for its subject, verb and article use would improve clarity.

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