Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Some people think is its smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal. I strongaly agree because smoking is verry denjrus with health but i desagree smoking should be made illegal.

On the one hand, smoking is do not significang with health and neture. Many humans are smoke a cigarette with all places and people from around do negative effect. Most effect has children example: some kids father are smoke a cigarette with childrens near and this activityes was effect by kids health and people get diseases like cancer, heart attack furthermore some humans are death. This ganeretion are this world many cases are cancer with childrens, young people, old humans and high score with cancer and heart attack. Example my freind does not smoke but he has cancer because his father smokes but my freind are a cancer.

On the other hand, many people are seling the smoking releted thing example: sigrate, gaja, bidi many thing are selling a humans. This is verry bad and many humans are selling a illegaly ang people are buying a this dengrus thing.

In conclusion, i strongly agree because smoking are verry effect with health and life. This ganeration are this worl many cases are spme people smoking and high score with cancer and heart attack.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You give a clear, though contradictory, response: you say you agree that smoking causes serious illness, but disagree that it should be illegal. The discussion of second-hand smoke affecting children and your friend’s illness is relevant, and the conclusion repeats your concern about health. However, the reasons are only minimally developed, and the paragraph about selling cigarettes and other substances does not explain whether prohibition would be effective or why smoking should remain legal. The response also contains only 205 words; the 10 words copied from the prompt are excluded, so it is 45 words below the required minimum. Develop your position consistently and add specific explanation and support for each main reason.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic essay shape, with an introduction, two body paragraphs signposted by “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. This gives the reader some sense of the intended structure. However, ideas within paragraphs are not arranged clearly: the first body paragraph moves from smoking in public to children, diseases, and a personal example without explaining the links between them. The second paragraph introduces sales and illegal activity but does not connect this point clearly to your position. Repeated references to “this generation” and “many cases” also make progression difficult to follow. Organise each paragraph around one reason, then explain and illustrate it in a clear sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

You use a small set of relevant topic words, including “smoking,” “cigarette,” “children,” “cancer,” and “heart attack,” so the general subject is identifiable. However, vocabulary is basic and highly repetitive, and frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices strain the reader. Examples include “denjrus,” “sigrate,” and “gaja”; phrases such as “high score with cancer” and “negative effect” are also unclear or imprecise. Build a more accurate range for discussing health and policy, and check spelling carefully. For example, use “serious health risks,” “second-hand smoke,” and “restrict the sale of tobacco” where these match your intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

You attempt a few longer sentences and use basic linking structures, but sentence forms are very limited and grammatical errors are frequent enough to distort meaning. For example, “Some people think is its smoking can cause…” has an unclear clause structure, while “many humans are smoke” and “my freind are a cancer” show problems with verb forms and agreement. Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries are also often inaccurate, as in “with childrens near.” These errors make several ideas difficult to interpret. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses such as “because” and “although.” Check subject–verb agreement and use a full stop when one idea is complete.

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