Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, there is a growing debate about the serious illness of smooking .Some People are never take it serious but some others are argued with it .Now I want to discuss the both views.

I strongly believe that , Smoking is banned in public area because it is harlfrul for the smoker and the non smoker or also effect the childrens. it is caused a serious health issues like lung cancer , breathing issues and sleeping problems.Millions of people in worldwide are suffering from these serious issue and they want to smoking is prohibited in a public areas like parking , super markets and schools and univesities because it is effect the mental health of the peer groups .furthurmore ,smoking can cause aair pollution that is a major factor . Government take a strich action and pass a legal rule that is protect the public health.

On the other hand, In some areas smoking is not consider bad things and the people are promote it without any hesitation bur it create a mjaor of their children thats are living wirth them they are suffer from the breathing and sleeping issues .however smoking is not effect the smoker but it cause a mjaor illness for tyhe non smoker .

In my Opinion ,i agree with that goverenment take a strick action and focus on the health issues that are created by the smokers. Government and individual should works togather to creat a healthy environment and societies and built a good reputation in other cities and countries.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear overall view in the conclusion, agreeing that government should take action, and you identify relevant harms such as lung cancer, breathing problems, and risks to non-smokers and children. However, the response only partly addresses the exact proposal: the prompt asks whether smoking should be made illegal, while much of your argument focuses on banning it in public places. The opposing paragraph says that smoking is promoted in some areas, but does not explain a reason for allowing it or develop a balanced counterargument. To strengthen the response, state clearly whether you support a complete legal ban or restrictions in public spaces, then explain and support that position with specific reasoning or an example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and phrases such as “On the other hand” and “In my Opinion” signal shifts in the discussion. However, the progression between ideas is not consistently clear: the first body paragraph moves from health effects to public locations, mental health, air pollution and government action without explaining how each point connects. The second paragraph also repeats the harm to children and non-smokers rather than developing a distinct opposing view. Some linking words are used mechanically or do not express the intended relationship. Organise each paragraph around one main point, explain it in sequence, and use referencing and transitions to show how examples support that point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “lung cancer,” “air pollution,” “public health” and “non smoker,” so the reader can identify the subject and some of your main ideas. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices that sometimes make meaning difficult to follow, such as “smooking,” “harlfrul,” “aair pollution” and “a mjaor of their children.” Several phrases are also unnatural, including “serious illness of smoking” and “take a strict action.” Build a more accurate set of collocations for health and legislation, and check spelling and word forms carefully. For example, use “harmful to health,” “take strict measures,” and “smoking-related illnesses” in appropriate contexts.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example by using “because” and “that,” and you include some simple statements that communicate your general position. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and attempts at complex sentences are often faulty. Errors in verb forms and agreement appear in phrases such as “some People are never take it serious,” “it is caused a serious health issues,” and “Government and individual should works togather.” Articles, plurals and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, making several sentences difficult to process. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with one clear subordinate clause. Check subject–verb agreement, verb forms after modal verbs, and punctuation between complete ideas.

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