Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

According to recent situations, the smoking is most widely problem in all over the world.This lead to very serious diseases among the all population. In this way , many are other issues is spread due to smoking. in this regard government should take act and give awarness to the people to avoid smoking.Therefore, i strongly agree with this statement and in my view it should be made illegal.

Smoking has diffrent bad effect in socialy and health sector. firstly it heavily effect the lungs.Morever , the whos do smoking they had also the problem of heavy breath. in this way the smoking fully effect the human health.

for example, the smoking rate in asian countries is more then the europe , therefore the health problems in asia is more then the other countirs all this cause by smoking.

On the other side smoking also has effect on budget , the more part of earnings people spend on smoking and they did not manage the budget in their familes this cause spread the proverty in all over world. it also bad for enviroment and for young genrations , many of children saw his parents do smoking so in this way they started to do smoking which considerd bad manner in good societs and also its not accepable in islamic religon. there smoking is not best for the all ages of peoples .

In conclusion, smoking had bad effect on health and in the enviroment morever in this the more money is waste . There i stronly agree with this opinon and suppert the government departments to stop this bad activity in all over the world .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction: you strongly agree that smoking should be illegal, and the conclusion restates this view. You address several relevant consequences, including harm to health, household finances, the environment, and young people copying their parents. These points show a relevant response to the question. However, some ideas are asserted rather than explained: for example, the comparison between smoking rates in Asia and Europe is not supported, and the link between smoking and poverty needs clearer reasoning. The discussion also focuses more on the harms of smoking than on why making it illegal is the appropriate response. Develop that central argument by considering how a ban could work and addressing a possible counterargument, such as personal freedom or enforcement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an overall structure, with an introduction, supporting paragraphs and a conclusion, and the reader can follow the broad progression from health effects to financial and social effects. You also use signposts such as “Firstly,” “On the other side” and “In conclusion.” However, connections between ideas are sometimes mechanical or unclear. For instance, “therefore” introduces the Asia–Europe comparison without showing how the evidence supports the claim, while “In this way” is repeated without clarifying the relationship between points. The second body paragraph also combines household spending, poverty, the environment, children and religion, making its focus difficult to follow. Group related points into separate paragraphs and use clearer references and transitions to show how each supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “serious diseases,” “health sector,” “environment” and “young generations,” and the reader can generally identify your intended meaning. However, the range is basic and several word-choice, collocation and spelling problems make the writing less clear or natural. Examples include “the smoking is most widely problem,” “heavy breath,” “spread the proverty” and “bad manner in good societs.” Some terms are repeated, particularly “effect” and “bad,” rather than replaced with more precise language. Work on accurate topic collocations and check spelling carefully; for example, describe smoking as a “widespread problem,” say it “damages the lungs,” and refer to “financial hardship” or “social norms.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You use some simple sentences and attempt longer structures with reasons and examples, so the response is not limited entirely to one sentence pattern. However, control of sentence structure and basic grammar is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships between ideas hard to understand. For example, “This lead to very serious diseases among the all population” has problems with verb agreement and article use, while “the more part of earnings people spend on smoking” has an unclear sentence structure. There are also errors in tense and agreement, as in “the smoking rate … is more” followed by “the health problems … is more.” Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check articles, plurals, agreement and punctuation when editing.

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