Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Smoking a Ciggrete are being a Reason for Many Health problems and This activity shoukld have to consider illegal and Ban.

According to my observation this is very bad additcion in our society Nowadays. And i completley agree with this on full extent. Person from every age are getting involved in these activity. and I belive this is one of the worst thing you can do with yourself. smooking can be very harmfull for Our daily life as well you can losse your stamina you experinced alot of coughing everytime. its not only dangerous for that person who is smoking. also Left same effect on the other person who is sitting or standing very next to him. on the other hand if we talk about disease the main disease is a cancer there is different type of cancers like lung, mouth, feet. smoking totally destroy you inner system kidney lungs liver stomach. Now this thing is getting more advanced now days generation is getting invloved in this in a very large no of amount they start doing vaping, seesha and some electronics stuff like that. government should take a very strict action againest them and make this items prohibted for under 18 and students. and this thing should must be banned.

Our family also have led from this My Grandfather smoked alot he finihed almost 3 packets in a day. and after sometime he start feeling some pain on his left side when he visit a doctor after several test he diagnosed with Kidney and lung problem becasue of alot of smoking.

I conclude this smoking is avery bad for our health and government have to make some polices and ban this stuff in our country.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you strongly agree that smoking should be banned, and you give relevant reasons, including harm to smokers and people nearby, health risks, and your grandfather’s experience. The personal example helps make the argument concrete. However, some points are asserted rather than explained: the list of affected organs and diseases is not clearly connected to evidence, and the discussion of vaping, shisha, and restrictions for under-18s shifts from the question of making smoking illegal without explaining how these policies support a wider ban. To strengthen the response, develop fewer points more fully and address the practical implications of prohibition, such as enforcement or individual choice, while maintaining your clear position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an identifiable progression from your opinion and general reasons to a family example and a concluding recommendation. The grandfather anecdote is placed separately, which helps distinguish it from the broader claims. However, most of the main argument is presented in one long paragraph, so several ideas—second-hand smoke, diseases, newer products, and government action—run together. Connectors such as “on the other hand” do not introduce a genuine contrast, and “and” is repeatedly used to join points. Use separate paragraphs for the argument, example, and conclusion, and choose linking phrases that show the actual relationship between ideas. Clearer references would also help readers follow who “them” refers to.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “addiction,” “stamina,” “cancer,” “prohibited,” and “strict action.” However, the range is often basic or repetitive, and frequent spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to read, such as “Ciggrete,” “harmfull,” “invloved,” and “polices.” Some combinations are also unnatural: “make this items prohibited” and “a very large no of amount” do not express the ideas clearly. Aim to learn accurate topic phrases and collocations, such as “smoking-related illnesses,” “second-hand smoke,” and “introduce a ban.” Proofread spelling carefully and avoid repeating “bad” and “very” when a more precise description is available.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can generally identify your main position and supporting example. However, control of sentence structure and basic grammar is inconsistent. For example, “Smoking a Ciggrete are being a Reason” has problems with agreement and sentence construction, while “Person from every age are getting involved” has an incorrect singular/plural pattern. Several sentences run together, particularly the long section beginning “smooking can be very harmfull,” and punctuation does not reliably mark sentence boundaries. Practise building accurate subject–verb patterns and separating related ideas into complete sentences. Then add a few controlled complex structures, for example, using “because” or “although,” rather than joining many clauses with “and.”

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