Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

smoking is just like a habit.Pwopl adopt it to keep oneself active and alert it works like a drug,due to ingredients of cigarettes tobacco contains nicotine that works and activates dopamine and serotonin that is a mood stabilizer hormones,this is why a person who is smoker feel happy and satisfiea after smoke.

However, smoking is not just a habit,it is an uncontrolled addiction,it has uncountable side effects on one's life and also bad effects on social life as well as state of economy.Anyone who is being smoke considered an active smoker and the others around him are passive smokers and are being effect the same as active smokers.

Smoking has several bad effects on human life, if it is not directly making sick anyone , however it could be a factor of causing a disease like it can cause lung cancer,oral cancer,cancer of throat,lip cancer , it also ha s risk factor of bineg an asthmatic and alos TB of lunhs.

in yung children and adults smoking can cause tooth decays and loss of appetite that directly interfere with their delay growth and development, if a qomen is pregnant she should consider a high risk pregnancy because smoking can cause resistance in the fetal circulation and congenital abnormal ity ,also risk of infection are greater among smoking people.

It coulde be a source of directly transmission based infection due toe air particle inhaled alot of germs, smokers has low immunity so that they are pron to be at higher infection risk

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response is relevant to the health effects of smoking and gives examples such as lung and oral cancer, risks during pregnancy, and harm to children. However, the central question is whether smoking should be made illegal, and you do not state a clear position on this or explain whether prohibition is justified. The opening discusses why people smoke, but this point is not connected to a policy argument. Several claims are listed rather than explained, and there is no conclusion that answers the question. To strengthen the response, state your degree of agreement in the introduction, develop reasons for or against a legal ban, and support them with clear explanations or examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: the response moves from why people smoke to effects on smokers, people nearby, children, and pregnancy. Linking words such as “However,” “also,” and “because” help show some relationships between ideas. Nevertheless, the progression is difficult to follow because the paragraphs do not build a clear argument about making smoking illegal, and the final point about infection is not connected to a concluding position. Several ideas are crowded into long sentences, while punctuation and spacing make boundaries unclear. Use a clear introduction, separate body paragraphs for distinct arguments, and a conclusion. Referencing each point explicitly and using transitions to show cause, contrast, and consequence would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “addiction,” “passive smokers,” “lung cancer,” “fetal circulation,” and “immunity,” which shows an attempt to discuss health consequences. However, the range is limited and many word choices or forms are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning hard to understand. For example, “being smoke” and “directly transmission based infection” do not express the intended ideas clearly, while “bad effects” is repeated and imprecise. Spelling errors such as “satisfiea,” “bineg,” and “pron” also reduce clarity. Build a more accurate set of phrases for discussing health risks and public policy, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some complex structures, including conditional clauses such as “if it is not directly making sick anyone” and a reason clause beginning “because smoking can cause…”. However, these attempts are often faulty, and sentence boundaries are frequently unclear. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in phrases such as “a person who is smoker feel” and “smokers has low immunity”; articles and sentence construction are also inconsistent. Commas are often used where full stops are needed, creating run-on sentences. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses. Pay particular attention to subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation so that your ideas remain clear.

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