Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Yes, Smoking can cause serious illness and we don't makr smoking illegal . But now a day smoking make illegal. people don't avoid smoking . Smoking is not good for health . It demage lungs. Then people hunt the cancer of lunger. lungs cancer is very bad disease. Mostly cancer patient joint the majority. In science I read smoking bad impact on your health. In daily life I observe most of the person who take or use smoking under the symptom likr cough , zeesing and difficulties in breathing . Due to smoking not only demag the lungs but also demage other part of body .Smoking is very bad thing in society . Due to knowlege of science it impact on your health . Health is important in life . The most famous qoute about health " Health is Wealth." Gorvement made illegal through newspapers and smoking things. Because people can affarid the smoking . Gorenment play important role inreducing smoking .people avoid from smoking because smoking is a very bad thing.I reduce smoking through many ideas due to communication with ither people. smoking increase the pollution . there are many types or pollution such as air pollution ,and water pollution and land .pollution . smoking increase the air pollution or mny other health problems. smoking demage the ozone layer . it effect the badly ozone layer due to this type of pollution ozone may be depleted and it is very dangers for our health or many other factors of the the environment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You take a position that smoking is harmful and should be restricted, and you give relevant reasons, including lung damage, cancer, breathing problems, and pollution. These examples show an attempt to address the topic. However, the question asks how far you agree that smoking should be made illegal, and your position is not consistently clear: the opening says “we don't make smoking illegal,” while later you say the government should make it illegal. The response also gives little explanation of why prohibition is preferable to other measures, and several claims are asserted rather than supported. State your degree of agreement clearly, then develop two or three reasons with explanation and a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a recognisable focus on the harms of smoking, and some linking expressions—such as “Due to” and “not only…but also”—show an effort to connect ideas. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, so the reader cannot easily distinguish the position, supporting reasons, and conclusion. Ideas also shift abruptly from illness to government action, personal communication, and ozone depletion. Repeated statements such as “Smoking is very bad” do not create clear progression, and references such as “this type of pollution” are not always easy to follow. Use separate paragraphs for your view, health effects, and policy, and connect each point in a logical sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “cancer,” “lungs,” “breathing,” “pollution,” and “government,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with “bad,” “health,” and “smoking” appearing frequently. Several inaccurate word choices or spellings make meaning difficult to interpret, for example “hunt the cancer of lunger,” “joint the majority,” and “smoking things.” Some expressions, such as “smoking increase the air pollution,” also need more natural collocation. Build a small set of accurate phrases for health effects and policy, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise vocabulary would make your reasons clearer and more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express several connected ideas, including a contrast with “but” and a cause-and-effect relationship with “Due to.” Most sentences, however, rely on short, simple patterns, and errors in sentence construction and agreement frequently make the message hard to follow. For example, “smoking make illegal” lacks a clear subject and correct verb form, while “smoking increase the pollution” does not show subject–verb agreement. There are also problems with articles, plurals, and punctuation, as in “the majority” and the inconsistent spacing around full stops. Practise forming complete subject–verb sentences first, then add accurate clauses using “because,” “although,” and “which.”

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