Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Yes, absolutely I am agree on your opinion because smoking is trending habit now a days. Smoking can cause major impact on smokers because it is harmfull for lungs. In this era, people are smoking for look an alpha guy but they forgot their impact in their life.

However, smoking have relevent causes like severe physical damage and increases the risk of numerous life-threatening diseases by delivering thousands of toxic chemicals and radioactive compounds directly into the body. Once the highlighted damage of smokers are become addictive. Smoking is not a bad habit but when individual become addictive and use as their meditation and use drugs with tobacco can cause highly on nervous system, build blood clots within body vessels which lead to heart attack and heart attack is serious cause of death now a days. I have a little knowledge because I saw some deaths of my peer friends and relative who suffered from lungs failure and at the end they died due to incresing blood presure which cause blood clots, a minor blockage of blood became the reason.

Moreover, government should try some better way to elliminate smoking from our country by building an infrastucture of rehabilitaion centre for drugs and smoke addictors, ban smoking and drugs from countrysides, campaign the pros and cons of smoking and block websites regarding the advertisement of smoking at social media.

As a result, smoking is leading to serious thread and cause major effects in human life. Trend of smoking become the major cause of blood presure ehich lead to death.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the opening: you agree that smoking causes serious harm and should be prohibited. You support this with relevant points about lung damage, addiction, heart disease and deaths, and you include personal observations about friends and relatives. These features address the task. However, the response does not fully develop the central question of making smoking illegal: the government proposals are listed, but the reasons for a legal ban, its likely effectiveness, or possible drawbacks are not explained. Some health claims, such as the link between smoking, blood pressure and clots, are also unclear. Develop the policy argument and explain each example more precisely to make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an opening position, a paragraph on health effects, a paragraph on government action, and a concluding statement. Connectors such as “However,” “Moreover,” and “As a result” help signal movement between points. At times, though, the progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow. The long health-effects paragraph shifts from addiction to medication, drugs, clots and personal deaths without clearly showing how each point relates to the argument. The conclusion repeats the danger of smoking rather than drawing together the main reasons. Use clearer topic sentences, divide related ideas into shorter units, and make references such as “the highlighted damage” more explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “life-threatening diseases,” “toxic chemicals,” “blood clots,” and “rehabilitation centre.” This gives the response relevant subject language, and some less common terms are used. However, noticeable spelling, word-form and collocation problems sometimes make the meaning unclear: “harmfull,” “addictors,” “smoking is trending habit,” and “serious thread” are examples. Some phrases also sound unnatural, such as “look an alpha guy” and “use as their meditation.” Aim for accurate, natural combinations rather than adding technical terms whose relationship to the point is uncertain. Proofreading spelling and choosing standard expressions would make your ideas easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a sentence explaining that smoking increases disease risk by delivering chemicals into the body. However, control of sentence structure and basic forms is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships between ideas hard to follow. Examples include “I am agree,” “smoking have,” and “Once the highlighted damage of smokers are become addictive.” The final sentence also contains a faulty clause structure: “Trend of smoking become the major cause … which lead to death.” Practise subject–verb agreement, verb forms, articles and complete clause construction. Build longer sentences from accurate simple clauses first, then add subordinate clauses and check punctuation.

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