Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Yes, smoking is very dangers for our body in today time . it can creat problem inside of our body like in lungs , breathing problem, hormonal etc and aur lips colour will also change if we smoke regularly in our daily life Routien. Before increaseing we should make permanent ban on smoking for the rest of life. if young children will start smoking at young age of their life. it can create more no of lungs disease in young children and no population will decrease in our country . if smoking things like ciggret , wape , tobbacoo , hukka , etc will be ban in our area the young and old people will also get low number of problem in their body and will also get good health in future . The government should be ban these type or smoking for upcoming young generation which will help them to get more educated and will get best personalited children in future . futher than thinking this all should be get permanently ban in our country for our future

After government take this step early this will be very helpful for our growth of our country and many more things .and in last i would like to say that every young age person should not get addicted to the smoking at current and in future which will help them to create best for their future and for their success in their upcoming life and will aslo get good health and stamina

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You take a clear position in favour of banning smoking, and you give relevant reasons, including harm to health and the possible effects on young people. The references to lung disease and protecting future generations show an attempt to explain why you agree. However, the response addresses the issue only partially: it does not consider the implications of making smoking illegal, such as enforcement or personal choice, and several claims are asserted rather than explained. For example, the link between banning smoking and children becoming “more educated” is unclear. To develop the response further, explain each main reason with a specific example and address at least one possible counterargument before reaffirming your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a recognisable overall direction: you state your view, give reasons related to health and young people, and finish by restating the benefits of avoiding smoking. Some linking expressions, such as “if” and “After government take this step,” also show an effort to connect ideas. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, so its stages are difficult to distinguish. Ideas are often added in a list, and the progression becomes repetitive, particularly in the repeated references to young people and the country’s future. Some connections are unclear, such as the move from a smoking ban to better education. Use separate paragraphs for your position, supporting reasons, and conclusion, and make each sentence build on the previous one.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “lungs disease,” “addicted,” “government,” and “good health,” so the reader can identify the subject and your main concerns. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “young,” “future,” and “good.” Frequent spelling and word-form errors, such as “dangers,” “ciggret,” “tobbacoo,” and “personalited,” make the writing harder to read. Some combinations are also unnatural, for example “number of problem in their body.” Build a more precise set of health and policy terms, and check spelling and collocations. More accurate phrases such as “respiratory diseases” and “public health” would help express your ideas clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer conditional sentences, for example, “if young children will start smoking at young age…” This shows an effort to connect causes and consequences, but the longer structures are often faulty and the overall range remains limited. Errors in verb forms, articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries occur frequently: “The government should be ban these type” and “After government take this step early this will be very helpful” are difficult to process. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with long run-on sentences and missing spaces after full stops. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then build longer sentences using correct forms such as “If children start smoking at a young age, they may…”

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