Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

i would like talk about a smoking.

smoking is the most dangerous for health. when the people uses the different type of smoking,for example: sighrate,wine,sheesha,etc:-

these things bad effect on the health. we are use the wine,after drink the wine.we are not walking proper,because we don't understand.who correct the way of home. wine more dangerous for health.

we talk about sighrate,sighrate most dangerous for healt. when the people using the sighrate,sighrate firstly bad affect on the lungs. when the lungs do not proper work,so, humans health utomatically does not work.

Secondly, smoking also affects people who do not smoke. This is called passive smoking. When people breathe in cigarette smoke, they may also suffer from health problems. For instance, children who live with smokers can breathe in harmful smoke at home. If smoking were illegal, these people could have a healthier environment

when the people use the illegal things about smoking wine another things. so the health people is not good,

main problem for health, heart attck common in people,because the main reason usues the smoking.

another highest range use the smoking main problem lungs,when the lungs damages,so the people how can the easily breathing.

On the other hand, some people believe that adults should have the freedom to make their own choices. I understand this point, but I think protecting people’s health is more important. Governments can also provide support to help smokers quit this habit.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the topic by arguing that smoking harms health, mentioning lung damage, heart attacks and passive smoking, and you briefly acknowledge the opposing view that adults should choose for themselves. However, the response only partially answers whether smoking should be made illegal: the position is not stated clearly at the beginning, and the discussion shifts to wine and alcohol, which are not the focus of the question. Several claims, such as smoking being the main cause of heart attacks, need clearer explanation or support. The response also falls 13 words short of the required minimum. To strengthen your answer, state your degree of agreement directly and develop relevant reasons and examples focused on smoking and legality.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: the response moves from general health effects to passive smoking and then considers personal freedom. The paragraph about passive smoking is the clearest section, with an example involving children. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because the opening repeats similar points about health, and the discussion of wine interrupts the focus on smoking. Connectors such as “Secondly” and “On the other hand” help signal relationships, but other links, including “so,” are often used mechanically or do not make the logic clear. Paragraphing is also inconsistent, with several ideas crowded together. Group each main reason into a focused paragraph and use clear links to show how each supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “passive smoking,” “lungs,” “health problems” and “healthier environment,” so the reader can identify your main concerns. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “dangerous,” “health” and “smoking.” Frequent spelling and word-choice problems, such as “sighrate,” “healt” and “heart attck,” make parts of the response harder to understand. Some combinations are also unnatural, for example “the health people is not good” and “the lungs damages.” Build a more accurate set of topic phrases and check spelling; this will help you express your ideas more precisely without relying on repeated general words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer cause-and-effect sentences, and the conditional “If smoking were illegal, these people could have a healthier environment” is a useful, accurate structure. However, the range is limited, and many sentences contain errors in articles, verb forms, agreement and sentence construction. For example, “when the people uses” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, while “we are use the wine” uses an incorrect verb form. Several clauses are joined in ways that make the meaning difficult to follow, as in “when the lungs do not proper work, so, humans health automatically does not work.” Practise building clear subject–verb sentences first, then combine them with accurate clauses using “because,” “when” and “if.”

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