Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Many argues that smoking is dangerous phenomenon spread especially between the youth generations , leading to several health issues. Not only it causes addiction in the short term, but also it causes illnesses that could lead to death in the long term. Studies have prooved that the major reason for many permanent diseases such as laung cancer and other respiratory issues is smoking. I believe that the solution always comes from the inside. The human being should be concious of what gives him the real value and take advantage of it and what it harmful so he avoids it with his full willingness. Compaigns should arise awerness according this plague. II think making things legal won't solve the problem but it can make it worse .I thin

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You take a position against making smoking illegal, stating that “making things legal won't solve the problem,” and you give relevant reasons about addiction and serious illnesses. However, the response addresses the question only minimally: it does not explain the case for prohibition or develop your own position with specific reasoning or examples. The claim that awareness campaigns should help is relevant, but it is not explained or supported. The response also ends abruptly at “I thin,” leaving your argument and conclusion incomplete. The required minimum length was not met, which contributes to the limited development. To improve, state your degree of agreement clearly, explain why legal prohibition would or would not work, and support each main point with a concrete example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The ideas are broadly connected: you move from smoking’s health effects to personal responsibility and then to awareness campaigns and legality. Linking expressions such as “Not only…but also” show an attempt to connect related points. However, the response is presented as one paragraph, and the progression from the health risks to the claim that solutions must come “from the inside” is not fully explained. The final sentence is unfinished, so the argument has no clear ending. Some connections between claims are also abrupt, particularly the move from individual willingness to the role of campaigns. Use separate paragraphs for your position, supporting reasons, and conclusion, and make each transition explain how the next point follows.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “addiction,” “permanent diseases,” “respiratory issues,” and “awareness,” which helps communicate the subject. There is also an attempt to use more formal phrasing, such as “the major reason” and “take advantage of it.” However, spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural word choices are noticeable, including “prooved,” “laung cancer,” “plague,” and “arise awareness.” These reduce the accuracy and naturalness of the message, even though the main topic remains understandable. Aim for precise collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, use “raise awareness of the problem” and “lung cancer”; choose wording that clearly expresses your intended meaning rather than relying on broad phrases such as “the real value.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some sentence variety, including the paired structure “Not only…but also,” and most of the intended meaning can be followed. However, the range of structures is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to affect clarity. For example, “Many argues” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “what it harmful” is missing a verb. The sentence beginning “The human being should…” shifts between singular “human being” and “him,” making the reference awkward, and the final “I thin” is incomplete. Punctuation spacing is also inconsistent. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add complex clauses; check agreement, missing verbs, pronoun reference, and sentence completion before submitting.

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