Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

SMOKING Is dagerous for health it is trueism every one know this reality in these days.although there is awearness among the people that smoking is harmfull for health,people are becoming accustomed of it day to day .this number is increasing every day even in many countries every one in a family is a chane smoker.now in schools ,collages, universities there are students who have become habitual of smoking.

smoking contains toxic and harmful eliments that effected humanhealth badly .mostly the smokers have lungs diseases they have bad caugh even whenever they laugh they have bad caugh.

unfotunatlly there are many members in my family even my husband is badly effected by smoking .he had been adopted this bad habit by some friend since his child hood and now he usually has health problem ,usually he feel difficulty in breathing .mostly we find him caughing and he is using nabolizer on daily basis he has very week . smoking exposes people to toxic substances nicotin, carbon monoxideand banzanewhich can cause serious health problems. including lung cancer and many other diseases.our new genration rapidly start using this bad habbit they are becoming accustomed of smoking .even developed can not s achive any success to stop their genration fr

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify smoking as harmful and provide relevant examples, including its effects on your husband and the risks of toxic substances. However, the response does not clearly answer the central question: whether smoking should be made illegal, and to what extent you agree. Most of the writing describes health consequences rather than explaining or defending a position on prohibition. The final point about younger people is unfinished, and there is little development of reasons or examples beyond the family account. The response is also 44 words below the required minimum, which limits the opportunity to address the task fully. State your position directly, then explain and support it with developed reasons, including consideration of why a ban would or would not be appropriate.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic progression from general comments about smoking to its health effects and then to a personal example. This gives the reader some sense of the topic, and the family example is relevant. However, the response is presented largely as one continuous paragraph, so the main points are not clearly separated. Connections between ideas are often abrupt, and punctuation makes sentence boundaries difficult to identify; for example, the shift from the family account to the list of toxic substances is not clearly signposted. The ending is incomplete, so the response has no clear conclusion. Use separate paragraphs for your position, supporting reasons, and conclusion, and connect each point with clear transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “toxic substances,” “carbon monoxide,” and “lung cancer,” and these terms help communicate the health risks you have in mind. There are also attempts to describe effects, such as “difficulty in breathing.” However, spelling errors and inaccurate word forms are frequent, including “dagerous,” “harmfull,” and “genration,” and some expressions are unclear or unnatural, such as “accustomed of it” and “bad caugh.” Repetition of “smoking,” “bad,” and “usually” also limits the range. Build a more accurate set of health and policy vocabulary, and check spelling and collocations so your meaning is easier to follow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response includes mostly simple statements and attempts some longer structures, such as the sentence beginning “although there is an awareness…” and the description of your husband’s smoking history. These attempts show some ability to connect clauses, but control is inconsistent. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are often missing, and there are errors in agreement and verb forms, as in “he usually feel” and “he had been adopted this bad habit.” Articles and sentence construction are also unreliable, making some passages difficult to read. Practise writing complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and check agreement and tense consistency. Using a few accurately controlled complex sentences would improve the range as well as clarity.

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