Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Consumption of nicotin is detremental to health .It can cause serious several deadly illness and should be illegal. I strongly agree to the statement. My pint of will be given and discussed through logical explanations.

Admittedly, it is proven by some researchers that nicotonic products such as cigerettes, opium , marizuana , heroine and morphin can cause serious injuries to our health if consumed on regular basis. So every country should banned it's production and take legal steps if people use it. There should be strict laws for the prevention of it's usage.

To begin with, after it was found on reasearch that nicotin is harmful for human body , the government of every country had totally banned it's farming and consumption. In addition to, officials had also take numerous steps to raise awareness among the citizens. Every countries goverment had made some laws regarding nicotin including campaigns, sensored the showcasing on media, movies and music videos and also made rules to have a label of it's harmful effects on cigerette packets. Moreover some goverment also added highly added VAT on nicotonic products to reduce it's mass consumption.

However, people still have cigerettes in their lives and as a result they are preone to various diseases. For instance, lung cancer, tumour , heart attack, kidney failure and so on. Smoking is widely popular amon man. Study shows that , 65% man consume cigerette on daily basis. So they are at great risk of cancer. Plus, smoking is also harmful for the babies even if they are on their mother's womb. In some cases, pregnent women had miscarages if they inhale nicotine. Therefore, some ciuntries had already banned it made rules if people were found guilty of buying and selling nicotonic products. In The USA , there are strict laws about drugs and other nicotinic products as life imprisonment and hefty fines. Overall, people should abstrain themselves of comsuming intoxicating products because it can cause them serious diseases and reduce their life expectency.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear from the opening: “I strongly agree,” and you give relevant reasons, including serious diseases, risks to unborn babies, and government measures such as warnings and taxes. These examples show an attempt to support your view. However, the response only partially addresses the central proposal of making smoking illegal. Much of the discussion shifts to banning “nicotonic products” broadly, including opium and other drugs, and describes existing policies rather than explaining why a complete legal ban on smoking is justified or workable. Some claims, such as the figure about men’s smoking and the USA’s penalties, are asserted without explanation. Develop the argument by clarifying what should be prohibited and addressing likely consequences or counterarguments.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph about government action, a paragraph on health effects, and a concluding recommendation. Linking expressions such as “To begin with,” “Moreover,” and “Therefore” help signal relationships between points. However, progression is not consistently clear. The second body paragraph moves from government awareness campaigns to taxes, then to disease effects and pregnancy, without a clear distinction between policy and health arguments. Some connections are also mechanical or unclear, such as “Therefore” before the claim about countries banning products. Use one main purpose for each paragraph, and make the links between evidence and your position explicit. Clearer referencing would also help readers follow what “it” refers to.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “awareness,” “consumption,” “harmful effects,” “mass consumption,” and “life expectancy.” This gives you some useful language for discussing public health and policy. However, the range is limited by repeated use of “nicotinic products,” “cigarettes,” and “harmful,” and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make parts difficult to understand. Examples include “serious injuries to our health,” “sensored the showcasing,” and “preone to various diseases.” There are also frequent spelling errors, such as “detremental,” “cigerettes,” and “expectency.” Build a more precise set of expressions for smoking and legislation, and check spelling and collocations carefully so your intended meaning is consistently clear.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and attempts at longer sentences, including clauses beginning with “if” and “even if.” However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty. For example, “So every country should banned” has an incorrect verb form, while “officials had also take” and “every countries goverment had made” show problems with tense and agreement. Articles and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “on regular basis” and “health .It.” These errors recur and sometimes make relationships between ideas harder to follow. Practise accurate present-tense statements for general facts, subject–verb agreement, and sentence punctuation. Then build longer sentences gradually, checking that each clause has a complete and correctly formed verb.

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