Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Smoke can lead to crucial illeness and it should be outlawed in all over world.

I strongly, agree with this statement that smoking should be ban and it cause major serious effects on the human healths and also play an indispensable role to spreading of air pollution.

Partially, By a research of World Health Organization (WHO), 30 million of tabacoo users in pakistan. As, smoking is legal in pakistan. Result, It's a key factor of many health issues like respiratory problems, lungs failure, and mouth cancer. In addition, About 1 million plus people are effected in these type of issues from smoke. Somking and tabacoo is also the reason of air pollution. As, Lahore stands on first most polluted city in the world. Smoke contain various harmful chemicals effect which play's a significant; role in Pollution.

Furthermore, Government should ban the smoking. For example, Cigarettes, Wapes and all other tabacoo items which cause smoke. Moreover, this particular law can change the dimensions of the society and help's to make a smoke free society. Additionally, the society can be protected from health issues. In addition, air pollution can also be controlled by this law. Government can also make smoking areas for the smokers who can't lived without this. And make it restricted on public areas and impose heavy duty fines. By this specific law, people should start obeying the official orders and ultimately, smoking is limitised.

In conclusion, I believe, smoking should be illegal on everywhere. The stakeholder's worked on this arrange awareness sessions for public to educate them that how much it's dangerous for our healths and also for environment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you strongly support making smoking illegal, and you address health and environmental consequences as well as possible government action. The examples of respiratory illness, lung failure, mouth cancer, and pollution in Lahore are relevant to the question. However, some points are asserted rather than explained: the figures about tobacco users and affected people are not clearly connected to the argument, and the claim that a ban would control air pollution needs more explanation. Your proposal to create smoking areas and impose fines also introduces a more qualified approach, which could be reconciled more clearly with your call for a complete ban. Develop these points and explain how your examples support your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the ideas generally move from harms to possible government measures. You also use linking expressions such as “Furthermore,” “Moreover” and “In addition.” However, these connectors are sometimes mechanical or placed awkwardly, as in “Partially, By a research” and the repeated use of “In addition.” Some sentences are difficult to connect because the relationship between claims is not made explicit; for example, the statistics about Pakistan and the statement about Lahore’s pollution need a clearer transition. The conclusion also shifts to awareness sessions without showing how this proposal relates to the earlier argument for prohibition. Use fewer, more precise transitions and make each paragraph’s progression explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “outlawed,” “respiratory problems,” “air pollution” and “awareness sessions.” These choices show an effort to discuss health and policy rather than relying only on basic terms. However, inaccurate spelling and word choice are noticeable and sometimes make the meaning less clear: “illen ess,” “tabacoo,” “Somking,” “effected” and “limitised” are examples. Several combinations are also unnatural, such as “crucial illnesses,” “lungs failure” and “play an indispensable role to spreading.” Repeated use of “smoking,” “pollution” and “issues” limits precision. Build a reliable set of topic-specific collocations and check spelling and word forms carefully; this will make your ideas easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both short statements and some attempts at longer, connected sentences, including clauses beginning with “As” and “who.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but there are some recurring errors in sentence construction, agreement, articles and punctuation. For example, “smoking should be ban” needs a passive form, while “Government should ban the smoking” has an unnecessary article. In “people who can't lived without this,” the verb form is incorrect, and “the stakeholder's worked” does not form a clear grammatical sentence. Several fragments beginning “As” or “Result” also need to be joined to a complete clause. Practise accurate passive constructions and complete complex sentences, and proofread punctuation and agreement.

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