Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Tobbacco consumption in the form of ciggerate is extermelly dangerous to health and may the reason of many diseases now a day and should also against the law I completly agree with this statment

first I would like to discuss how they pollute our enviornment it cause air pollution because smoke has many harmful chemical like Co2 and methane smoker through ciggerate in the streets everywhere which pollute our land and cause land pollution or also pollute our envionment when butts go into rivers and sea and kill fishes also pollute the water we drink

smoking badly effetct our health and leading cause of preventable death it contain carcinogenic substance which cause lung cancer and cardiovascular diseas

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear position—“I completly agree”—and give relevant reasons by mentioning environmental pollution and health risks, including lung cancer and cardiovascular disease. However, the response addresses the task only minimally: it does not explain why smoking should be made illegal, consider how a ban might work, or develop the reasons with examples or explanation. The environmental points are listed rather than connected to the question of legality, and the health argument ends before it is supported. The response also contains 117 words, so it does not meet the required minimum of 250. To improve, explain your reasons in detail, support them with a relevant example, and address the proposed legal ban directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic sequence of ideas: you begin with your opinion, then discuss environmental effects, and finally mention health consequences. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, the response is presented as one continuous block, with no clear paragraphing, and the progression between points is limited. The opening phrase “first I would like to discuss” signals a first reason, but there is no corresponding transition to a developed second point or conclusion. Several ideas are joined in a long chain, making relationships between them difficult to follow. Use separate paragraphs for your position, each main reason, and your conclusion; add clear links such as “Furthermore” and “Therefore” where they accurately show how the ideas connect.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “air pollution,” “land pollution,” “carcinogenic substance,” and “cardiovascular” disease. These terms show an attempt to discuss both environmental and medical effects. However, the range is limited, and repeated basic wording such as “pollute” and “cause” makes the explanation repetitive. Numerous spelling errors—such as “Tobbacco,” “ciggerate,” “extermelly,” and “enviornment”—make the text harder to read and sometimes obscure meaning. Some expressions are also imprecise, for example “smoker through ciggerate in the streets.” Build a more accurate range for discussing legislation and public health, and check spelling carefully. More precise phrases such as “discard cigarette butts” would make your meaning clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to express several connected ideas, but most sentences rely on simple structures or run together without clear punctuation. The opening is a fragment-like sequence ending without a full stop, and “it cause air pollution” lacks subject–verb agreement. In “smoking badly effetct our health,” the subject and verb do not agree, while “it contain” has the same problem. Articles and plural forms are also often missing, as in “many harmful chemical” and “carcinogenic substance.” These frequent errors can make the reader work to understand the intended relationships. Practise writing complete sentences with one main idea each, checking agreement, articles, and plural endings, and use full stops to separate ideas.

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