Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

One of the most controversial issue relates to smoking can cause serious illness and should be made illegal. In this easy, i am going to examine this question from both points of view.

On side of the arguments there are people who argue that the benfits of considerably outweigh its disadvantage. The main reason fro believing this is that smoking can couse is dengurous our health and its more disadvantages is the big one is you always somke is cancer problamd about our health.

On the other hand side people to smoke the advantages telling saying, If you have very hard work and then after compelte work you want take a smoke and take. Then your mind fresh and your hard working tired skin is feeling better.

Overall, we are talking about smoke is very dangurous about our health is don't have any benefit. Some people believe if take a smoke the your nind is fresh but i don't i trust is people is laying.

I am moslty seeing young people now taking a smoke in highest quantity because is trend our culture. So from perspective is now good way, Some people if take a smoke then our time making good and enjoy our feeling and tired feeling ends when we take smoke. I have also many friends taking a smoke in daily basis and some saying have health problams like in headche pain and also other problams telling. This are all problams about skin is have big problams smking daily basis

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address smoking and health, and your final paragraph suggests that you do not support smoking, so a position is present. However, the response does not clearly answer whether smoking should be made illegal. The opening promises to examine “both points of view,” but the arguments are not explained in a focused way: the health risks are mentioned, while the claim that smoking makes people feel relaxed is asserted without development. The discussion of young people and friends’ health problems is relevant, but the examples remain unclear and do not establish why prohibition is or is not justified. To strengthen the response, state your degree of agreement directly and develop two relevant reasons with clear explanations and specific examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction, opposing points, and a conclusion, and phrases such as “On the other hand” and “Overall” signal changes in direction. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the paragraphs do not consistently develop one clear point, and the conclusion repeats earlier claims rather than resolving the question of legality. Some links are confusing, as in “On side of the arguments,” and the shift from general claims to friends’ health problems is abrupt. Several ideas are repeated, particularly that smoking is dangerous and can make people feel better. Use a clearer sequence—position, reason, explanation, example—and make each paragraph serve one distinct purpose.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with recurring use of “smoke,” “problem,” “health,” and “people.” Some topic-related terms, including “cancer,” “trend,” and “health problems,” help communicate the subject, but frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices strain understanding: examples include “benfits,” “dengurous,” “somke,” and “problamd.” Phrases such as “your mind fresh” and “hard working tired skin” do not express the intended ideas clearly. Build a small set of accurate expressions for health risks, relaxation, and legal restrictions, and check spelling carefully. More precise collocations would make your arguments easier to understand without requiring unusually advanced vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a few longer sentences, including “I am mostly seeing young people now taking a smoke…” and the sentence about friends reporting health problems, but these structures are often difficult to follow. Errors in sentence formation, verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation occur throughout. For example, “smoking can cause serious illness and should be made illegal” is not connected grammatically to the opening clause, while “Some people believe if take a smoke the your nind is fresh” lacks a clear subject and a complete clause structure. Most sentences rely on simple patterns, and the attempted complex forms are frequently faulty. Practise writing complete subject–verb clauses first, then join them with accurate “because,” “although,” or “if” structures.

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