Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Smoking should be illegal and it can cause serious illness

Smoking should be banned in over all world and should be illegal goverment should maje check and balance on the shops and markets who are promoting ciggrettes.Those shops should be sealled in every country .

According to my prespective smoking is the most dangerous thing which some human consum daily to make themselve happy and stress relif .If human body consum ciggrettes on daily bases there lungs will stop working and there kidneys will not response them in an order . when they will not get ciggretts they will start begaving aggressive and will start annoying others .

they will face all medical issues also related to there Reproductive system there sperms will get dead and they will not be able to perform there sexual functions and will not be able to bring there offsprings

According to my experience practically i have seen that a person who was my neighbore he was addicted to smoking and after some time he start getting lungs issues and also sexual issues dua to which he was addmitted in hospital but later he get expired because of his addiction with ciggrettes was too much and he was not able to survive without it not even drugs were effecting on him in his last stage .

Individual should avoid smoking and ciggrettes should be banned in over all the world because it cause a wide range of heath issues and also not will be able to bring offsprings .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear view that smoking should be illegal, and you support it with health consequences and a personal example about your neighbour. These points are relevant to the question, but the response addresses the issue only partially because it mainly lists harms rather than explaining why a complete legal ban is the best response. For example, the claims about lung and reproductive problems could be explained more carefully, and the neighbour’s experience needs a clearer link to the wider argument. Consider acknowledging a counterpoint, such as personal freedom or the difficulty of enforcing a ban, then explain why your position remains stronger. This would make your reasoning more developed and balanced.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has some organisation: it moves from your position, to general health effects, to a personal example, and then to a concluding recommendation. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these stages. However, the overall progression is not consistently clear, and several ideas are joined in long, crowded sentences. The repeated use of “According to” and “and” does not always show how one point relates to the next. The final paragraph repeats the opening claim rather than drawing together the reasons. Use clearer topic sentences and linking expressions that show cause, consequence, or contrast, and keep each paragraph focused on one main point. This would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “addicted,” “lungs,” “medical issues,” and “reproductive system,” so the reader can understand the general subject. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “smoking,” “cigarettes,” and “issues.” Frequent spelling errors, such as “goverment,” “ciggrettes,” and “heath,” also make the writing less clear. Some expressions are not natural in this context, including “make themselve happy and stress relif” and “their kidneys will not response them in an order.” Build a more precise set of health and policy terms, and check spelling and collocations carefully. More accurate vocabulary would help you express the argument without relying on repeated general words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, but control is inconsistent, particularly when several clauses are combined. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in examples such as “there lungs will stop working,” “they will start begaving,” and “it cause a wide range.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also often unclear, as in the long sentence beginning “According to my experience practically i have seen.” These problems sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using a controlled range of clauses. Pay particular attention to subject–verb agreement, pronouns, articles, and full stops, and proofread each sentence for a complete grammatical structure.

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