Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The visitor of Caryl island

In 2000 there a some few visitors that visited Caryl island but 2000 there are some kind of fun and interesting places that is vibing and hangout 2002 the visitors had been increasing around 6000 per visitors but a few people more increased by tripping over a [redacted phone] in 2004 a lot of few change is per of people visiting Caryl island which is quite nice good 2006 Al or of changing a lot of foreigners and visitors that would like to hangout with their own vibes Caryl island was once a famous in 2006 a lot foreigners like to visit it 2008 is was Cary island prime visitors A lot of fun a lot of kid parents would partying on Carly island 2008 the instrufature is very poor of development but somehow the Carly island is corrupted lack of infrastructure building and a lot of leak water pipe and somehow the Carly island had been shut down since 2008

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response makes a few references to the years shown, but it does not provide a clear summary of the graph’s main features. Some figures are inaccurate: for example, it says visitors increased to around 6,000 in 2002, whereas returning visitors were about 10,000 and first-time visitors about 4,000. It also describes the island’s infrastructure, water pipes, and closure, none of which is shown in the visual. The overview is therefore missing, and the key comparison—that returning visitors peaked in 2006 while first-time visitors rose after 2002—is not reported. To improve, describe only the two visitor trends, select a few accurate figures, and state the main overall pattern clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a loose chronological sequence, with references to 2000, 2002, 2004, 2006, and 2008, so the reader can see an attempt to follow the graph’s timeline. However, the response is largely one continuous passage without clear paragraphing or a logical division between an overview and supporting details. Ideas are joined together with little punctuation, and phrases such as “a lot of few change” and “2008 the instrufature” make the progression difficult to follow. Several unrelated claims about visitors’ activities and the island’s condition interrupt the sequence. Organise the response into a brief overview and one or two paragraphs comparing the trends, using clear sentence boundaries and simple linking expressions.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The response uses a small set of relevant words, including “visitors,” “increased,” and “Caryl island,” and makes some effort to describe change over time. However, vocabulary is repetitive and often unsuitable for an objective graph summary. Informal expressions such as “vibing,” “hangout,” and “partying” do not fit the task, while phrases such as “a lot of few change” and “prime visitors” are unclear. There are also spelling or word-form problems, including “instrufature.” Use precise, neutral terms for trends and comparisons, and avoid adding descriptions that the graph cannot support. For example, “rose,” “reached a peak,” and “declined slightly” would be more appropriate choices.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response attempts to describe several years, but most ideas are presented in long, loosely connected strings rather than controlled sentences. Basic grammatical patterns are often incomplete or inaccurate, as in “In 2000 there a some few visitors” and “2008 is was Cary island prime visitors.” Verb forms and agreement are also unclear in phrases such as “places that is vibing.” Punctuation is largely absent, making it difficult to identify where one idea ends and another begins. These problems sometimes obscure the intended meaning. Practise writing short, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then combine related information using accurate clauses—for example, “Returning visitors rose to about 10,000 in 2002.”

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