Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line chart illustarates the first time vistors and returning vistors of Caryl island from 2000 to 2008.

Overall, there was a growth in both the visiotrs the visitors.the Returning visitors are accpunted for the highest while first time visitors are fewer.Although, it had a dramatic growth but it is less than the returning visitors.

In 2000, the first time vistors were nearly 8000 people while it had decreased in the year 2002 which is almost 4000. There was steady growth in it from the following years 2004,2006,and 2008 with 6000,8000, and 11000 respectively.

The returning visitors, were almost less with 1500 people and graduallly increased to 10,000 in 2002. In 2004 it almost reached 12,000 and in 2006,it reached the peak with nearly 15000.In contrast, in 2008 it had decreased to 13000.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify both visitor groups and report the main broad patterns: first-time visitors fall before rising, while returning visitors climb to a peak and then decline. Several figures are close to the chart, including about 8,000 first-time visitors in 2000 and 12,000 returning visitors in 2004. However, the overview is unclear and contains a contradiction: it says both groups grew, although first-time visitors initially fell, and the comparison that returning visitors were highest is not explained precisely. The 2000 figure for returning visitors is substantially understated as 1,500 rather than about 3,000, and the 2006 first-time figure is given as 8,000 rather than about 9,300. The response is also 17 words below the required minimum. Include a clearer overview and more accurate key figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the two visitor groups. This makes the main categories easy to identify. However, progression within the overview is difficult to follow, especially in “there was a growth in both the visitors the visitors” and the unclear contrast beginning “Although.” Some linking is attempted through “while,” “In contrast,” and “from the following years,” but connections are sometimes awkward or do not clearly express the relationship between figures. Punctuation and spacing also interrupt the flow. To improve, make the overview a complete, concise summary of the contrasting trends, then present each series in chronological order using clear links between changes.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “decreased,” “steady growth,” “peak,” and “in contrast,” which helps communicate changes over time. However, the range is limited and several word-choice or spelling errors reduce clarity: “illustarates,” “vistors,” “visiotrs,” and “accpounted” are noticeable, while “there was a growth” and “were almost less” are not natural expressions for describing data. Repetition of “visitors” and “increased” also limits precision. Aim to use accurate, conventional trend language and check spelling carefully. For example, describe a figure as “stood at” a number, then say it “fell,” “rose,” or “reached a peak,” rather than using unclear phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a few different sentence forms, including comparisons and time clauses, but control is inconsistent. The overview contains a sentence fragment or run-on construction in “Although, it had a dramatic growth but it is less than the returning visitors,” and the opening overview sentence has faulty sentence boundaries. Other examples include “The returning visitors, were…” with an unnecessary comma and “In 2004 it almost reached…” without consistent punctuation. These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to understand. Use complete sentences with one clear main clause, and check subject–verb structure, articles, and punctuation. A more controlled pattern would be: “Returning visitors rose from about 3,000 in 2000 to 10,000 in 2002.”

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