Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This line graph described the number of visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
It showed first time visitors in 2000 and decreased in 2002 and jumped in 2008.On other side, returning visitors was at lowest point and reached at top in 2006.
In 2000, first time visitors started journey to caryl island and their numbers were 8000 while in 2002 they reduced to 4000.Their quantity increased in 2004 and 2006 and their numbers were 6000 and 10000.At the end, they reached 12000 in 2008.
In 2002, the returning visitors were at lowest numbers which was equal to 3000 but they increased as the time passed and reached to 10000 in 2002.These numbers continued to grow in 2004 which were 12000 and in 2006 they were 15000.At the end, these were slightly decreased to 1300
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
You identify both visitor groups and report several broad movements, including the fall in first-time visitors to 4,000 in 2002 and the rise in returning visitors through 2006. However, the overview is unclear and contains a major misreading: returning visitors were not at their lowest in 2002; they were about 3,000 in 2000 and rose to 10,000 by 2002. The final figure for returning visitors is written as “1300,” rather than approximately 13,400, and the first-time figure for 2006 is overstated. The response also has only 128 words, below the 150-word minimum, limiting its coverage. Add a clear overview and check each key figure against the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has some basic organisation: it begins with an introduction, then discusses first-time visitors before returning visitors. This gives the reader a general sense of the two series. However, progression is not consistently clear, and the overview mixes trends without establishing accurate comparisons. For example, “On other side” introduces the returning visitors, but the following account starts with 2002 and then repeats that year as the point when numbers reached 10,000. Linking is also limited and sometimes mechanical, with repeated use of “At the end” and “in 2002.” Use separate, clearly focused paragraphs and sequence each series chronologically, with accurate references such as “By 2008” to guide the reader.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use enough basic vocabulary to communicate the topic and some changes, including “decreased,” “increased,” “continued to grow,” and “slightly decreased.” However, the range is limited and several expressions are unnatural or imprecise, such as “started journey,” “their quantity,” and “reached at top.” Repetition of “numbers” and “visitors” also makes the account less flexible. The phrase “at lowest numbers” is awkward, while “1300” creates uncertainty about the final figure as well as reflecting a data error. Aim for precise chart language and natural collocations, for example “the figure fell,” “rose steadily,” and “peaked at approximately 15,200.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response mainly uses simple sentence patterns, with a few attempts to join ideas using “while” and “which.” Errors are frequent enough to make some sentences awkward or difficult to follow. For example, “returning visitors was” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “which was equal to 3000” does not clearly agree with the plural “numbers.” The sentence beginning “It showed first time visitors in 2000 and decreased in 2002” has an unclear subject, and punctuation is inconsistent, including missing spaces after full stops. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement, articles, and punctuation. More accurate control of these basic structures would make your comparisons easier to understand.
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